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Many people are doing their shopping on the internet nowadays. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of shopping online. v.1

Many people are doing their shopping on the internet nowadays. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of shopping online. v. 1
With each day, e-commerce is getting more accessible and gaining popularity. We can buy anything from anywhere across the world by clicking on only one button. It also helps us save time and money. Although several drawbacks are also linked with this phenomenon, which mainly includes the security risk, I will discuss both the advantages and disadvantages in detail, in the upcoming paragraphs. Online shopping is gaining popularity as women who are known to be keen on shopping can surf the internet, to place an order for online shopping. The main benefit of is that it can save both time and money for the buyer. For example, women can choose the products of their own choice, quality and price, which is mentioned on the products. Furthermore, they can also inquire about the products, from a customer who already bought this. Secondly, it can help the country, to increase business and to decrease inflation across the country. Thus, shopkeepers can use different ways or ideas to improve their business. However, we cannot ignore the drawbacks of online shopping. The security risk is one of them. Sharing information, during online shopping, can be used by hackers. Other, demerits include low-quality products. Let's take the example of clothes, girls when buying clothes, through online shoping, often feel disappointed when they see the original product and their stuff as it turns out to be different from the image. To conclude, the advantages of online shopping outweigh the disadvantages. Of course, shoppers have to exercise some common sense and keep their device free of malware if they want to enjoy online shopping.
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buy
anything from anywhere across the world by clicking on
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only
one button. It
also
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helps
us save time and money. Although several drawbacks are
also
linked with this phenomenon, which
mainly
includes the security
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risk
, I will discuss both the advantages and disadvantages in detail, in the upcoming paragraphs.

Online
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shopping
is gaining popularity as women who
are known
to be keen on
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shopping
can surf the internet, to place an order for
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online
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shopping
. The main benefit of is that it can save both time and money for the buyer.
For example
, women can choose the
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products
of their
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own
choice, quality and price, which
is mentioned
on the
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products
.
Furthermore
, they can
also
inquire about the
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products
, from a customer who already
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bought
this.
Secondly
, it can
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help
the country, to increase business and to decrease inflation across the country.
Thus
, shopkeepers can
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use
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different
ways or
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ideas
to
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improve
their business.

However
, we cannot
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ignore
the drawbacks of
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online
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shopping
. The security
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risk
is one of them. Sharing information, during
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online
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shopping
, can be
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used
by hackers. Other, demerits include low-quality
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products
.
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Let
's take the example of clothes, girls when buying clothes, through
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online
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shoping
,
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often
feel disappointed when they
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see
the original
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product
and their stuff as it turns out to be
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different
from the image.

To conclude
, the advantages of
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online
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shopping
outweigh the disadvantages.
Of course
, shoppers
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have to
exercise
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some
common sense and
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keep
their device free of malware if they want to enjoy
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online
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shopping
.
12Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
18Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes

IELTS essay Many people are doing their shopping on the internet nowadays. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of shopping online. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
267 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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