Do you want to improve your writing? Try our new evaluation service and get detailed feedback.
Check Your Text it's free

Many parents nowadays educate their children at home rather than sending them to school. Do you think advantages of home education outweigh disadvantages?

Many parents nowadays educate their children at home rather than sending them to school. Do you think advantages of home education outweigh disadvantages? ELMYR
The ultimate goal of parents nowadays for their children is to provide them exquisite education. Some parents do not believe in sending their kids to school, rather they educate them at home. In my opinion, the disadvantages of educating student at home overcomes its advantages. There is no better place to gain knowledge and education than school. Firstly a particular and helpful environment is needed to get educate which can only be possible at school and not at home. At home students get diverted attention from their parents and the children do not learn to behave in a proper disciplined manner which would in future may hinder their growth. Moreover, students need some facilities that would make learning a interesting and a easier task. Such facilities are easily available at schools as they are maintained and updated with the latest technologies, about which parents are unaware and certainly not available at home. For example, presenting an history chapter on projector with proper visual contents will be more enjoyable to students and make them remember things without any effort. Apart from this, it is not possible to have friends everyday at home and study with them but that can be convenient at schools. Learning with friends brings great joy among students. On the other hand, it gets tiring job for primary school students to get up early every morning and return every evening to the home. Due to this, the children may constantly feel sleepy or stressed sometimes which might affects their mind and resist them from generating innovative ideas. In conclusion, although going to school increases stress among students but learning would become more easier with suitable environment, attention, facilities and presence of friends during school hours.
The ultimate goal of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
parents
nowadays for their children is to provide them exquisite education.
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
Some
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
parents
do not believe in sending their kids to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
school
,
rather
they educate them at home. In my opinion, the disadvantages of educating
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
student
at home overcomes its advantages.

There is no better place to gain knowledge and education than
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
school
.
Firstly
a particular and helpful environment
is needed
to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
educate which can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
be possible at
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
school
and not at home. At home
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
students
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
diverted attention from their
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
parents
and the children do not learn to behave in a proper disciplined manner which would in future may hinder their growth.

Moreover
,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
students
need
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
facilities that would
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
learning
Use "an" instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
a
interesting and
Use "an" instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
a
easier task. Such facilities are
easily
available at
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
schools
as they
are maintained
and updated with the latest technologies, about which
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
parents
are unaware and
certainly
not available at home.
For example
, presenting
Use "a" instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
an
history chapter on projector with proper visual contents will be more enjoyable to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
students
and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
them remember things without any effort. Apart from this, it is not possible to have friends
'Everyday' is an adjective. Did you mean "every day"?
everyday
at home and study with them
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
that can be convenient at
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
schools
. Learning with friends brings great joy among students.

On the other hand
, it
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
gets
tiring job for primary
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
school
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
students
to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
up early every morning and return every evening to the home. Due to this, the children may
constantly
feel sleepy or
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
stressed
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
sometimes
which might affects their mind and resist them from generating innovative
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
ideas
.

In conclusion
, although going to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
school
increases
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
stress
among
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
students
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
learning would become
Use only "easier" (without 'more') when you use the comparative.
more easier
with suitable environment, attention, facilities and presence of friends during
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
school
hours.
What do you think?
  • This is funny writingFunny
  • I love this writingLove
  • This writing has blown my mindWow
  • It made me angryAngry
  • It made me sadSad

IELTS essay Many parents nowadays educate their children at home rather than sending them to school. Do you think advantages of home education outweigh disadvantages?

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
287 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
Labels Descriptions
  • ?
    Currently is not available
  • Meet the criteria
  • Doesn't meet the criteria
Recent posts





Get more results for topic:
  • Many parents nowadays educate their children at home rather than sending them to school. Do you think advantages of home education outweigh disadvantages?