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Many individuals believe that radio become obsolete and there is no importance to hear radio for amusement and tidings.

Many individuals believe that radio become obsolete and there is no importance to hear radio for amusement and tidings. I totally agree with the statement. To begin with, a lot of inventions has been done with the help of technology such as mobile phones and computers and due to these the impact of radio has faded. We can only hear the programs on radio without watching them and we can not change radio channels as our wish. Sometimes, numerous boring channels are heard on radio and we are compel to listen them. Radio stops working in bad weather conditions. However, the popularity of radio has decreased due to television and computers. Because we can not only listen the programs in TV but also watch them in a better way. These devices always provide good data and we can change channels according to our wish. These devices are keen to use in bad weather conditions.
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radio
become obsolete and there is no importance to hear
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radio
for amusement and tidings. I
totally
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agree
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begin
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a lot of
inventions has
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with the
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help
of technology such as mobile phones and computers and due to these the impact of
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radio
has faded. We can
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only
hear the programs on
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radio
without watching
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them and
we can not
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change
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radio
channels as our wish.
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Sometimes
, numerous boring channels
are heard
on
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radio and
we are
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compel
to listen them.
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Radio
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stops
working in
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bad
weather conditions.
However
, the popularity of
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radio
has decreased due to television and computers.
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Because
we can not
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only
listen the programs in TV
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but
also
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watch
them in a better way. These devices always provide
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good
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data and
we can
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change
channels according to our wish. These devices are keen to
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use
in
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bad
weather conditions.

IELTS essay Many individuals believe that radio become obsolete and there is no importance to hear radio for amusement and tidings.

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154 words
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