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Many Individuals are unable to pay the dues on time because of unplanned and excess usage of credit card. I strongly believe that banks should check individual’s financial history and issue to those who can pay on time.

Many Individuals are unable to pay the dues on time because of unplanned and excess usage of credit card. I strongly believe that banks should check individual’s financial history and issue to those who can pay on time. pLjLy
Firstly, it is human tendency to shop easily using the credit card, without thinking the future financial situation. Mostly, people get attracted to offers and benefits provided by the bank to the card users and this leads to more spending. Moreover, people can withdraw the money from the ATM’s for their personnel or emergency usage but with higher rate of interests. However, if people fail to pay the dues on time, higher rate of interest will be charged which leads to more debt. Recently, one of my friends bought bike by using credit card without thinking of financial situation, he was unable to pay the instalments, which led him to pay the due with high rate of interest. On the other hand, banks should check the financial status of an individual before issuing the credit card. Bank must check last 6 months revenue stream and payslips of the applicant to know his income source. Also, bank have to check credit history to know the past records of customer. This will help to set the credit limit of the respective person. For instance, I went to issue the credit card of co-operative bank, it was easily issued without checking my documents. If bank continues to issue the credit card in this way, then definitely this will lead bank to increased number defaulters. To sum up, though there are users who would spend carelessly, but bank must check documents strictly to avoid economic instability.
Firstly
, it
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is human
tendency to shop
easily
using the
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credit
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card
, without thinking the future financial situation.
Mostly
,
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people
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get
attracted to offers and benefits provided by the
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bank
to the
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card
users and this leads to more spending.
Moreover
,
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people
can withdraw the money from the ATM’s for their personnel or emergency usage
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but
with higher rate of interests.
However
, if
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people
fail to pay the dues on time, higher rate of interest will
be charged
which leads to more debt. Recently, one of my friends
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bought
bike by using
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credit
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card
without thinking of financial situation, he was unable to pay the
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instalments
, which led him to pay the due with high rate of interest.

On the other hand
,
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banks
should
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check
the financial status of an individual
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before
issuing the
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credit
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card
.
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Bank
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must
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check
last 6 months revenue stream and payslips of the applicant to know his income source.
Also
,
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bank
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have to
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check
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credit
history to know the past records of customer. This will
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
to set the
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credit
limit of the respective person.
For instance
, I went to issue the
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credit
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card
of co-operative
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bank
, it was
easily
issued without checking my documents. If
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bank
continues to issue the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
credit
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
card
in this way, then definitely this will lead
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
bank
to increased number defaulters.

To sum up, though there are users who would spend
carelessly
,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
bank
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
must
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
check
documents
strictly
to avoid economic instability.
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IELTS essay Many Individuals are unable to pay the dues on time because of unplanned and excess usage of credit card. I strongly believe that banks should check individual’s financial history and issue to those who can pay on time.

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