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Many governments think that economic progress is their most important goal. Some people, however, think that other types of progress are equally important for a country. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Many governments think that economic progress is their most important goal. Some people, however, think that other types of progress are equally important for a country. NeAj
Experts throughout both the developing and developed world have debated whether economic progress is the only important goal or there are other progress which are equally important. I hold the view that there might be some other types of progress, equal crucial for a country. Both the views will be discussed in the following paragraphs To begin with, it is important to bear in mind that economy plays a vital role in countries development. The economic factor decides the currency value, position of a country in the market, inflationary factors, etc. Economic progression is the nation’s most crucial aim because it is the face of country in the monetary world. For instance, a nations monetary value is judge by its economic growth. On the other hand, there are those who outcry that other types of progress are equally necessary for the nation. There are plethora of progresses, apart from economy, that plays an essential role in country's development namely Olympics, spaces achievement, international competitions, etc. Government should not ignore these compelling factors that helps in lifting up a nations value. To decipher what is being told above, when the Olympic Games are held, the participants are registered with their country’s name and when they win, the nation’s name come forward. Likewise, space achievements and international competitions go hand in hand with the above situation. All in all economic progress is not the only factor in the limelight, other factors are equally crucial for country's development as well as the other stages for achieving a goal.
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goal or there are
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which are
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. I hold the view that there might be
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country
. Both the views will
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with, it is
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important
to bear in mind that economy plays a vital role in
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countries
development. The
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economic
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factor
decides the currency value, position of a
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country
in the market, inflationary
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factors
, etc.
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Economic
progression is the
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nation’s
most crucial aim
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because
it is the face of
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country
in the monetary world.
For instance
, a
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nations
monetary value is judge by its
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economic
growth. On the
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other
hand, there are those
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who outcry
that
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other
types of
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progress
are
equally
necessary for the
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nation
. There are plethora of
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progresses
, apart from economy, that plays an essential role in country's development
namely
Olympics, spaces achievement, international competitions, etc.
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Government
should not
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ignore
these compelling
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lifting up
a
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value. To decipher what is being
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above, when the Olympic Games
are held
, the participants
are registered
with their
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country’s
name and when they win, the
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nation’s
name
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come
forward.
Likewise
, space achievements and international competitions go hand in hand with the above situation.

All in all
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economic
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progress
is not the
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only
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factor
in the limelight,
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other
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factors
are
equally
crucial for country's development
as well
as the
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other
stages for achieving a goal.
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IELTS essay Many governments think that economic progress is their most important goal. Some people, however, think that other types of progress are equally important for a country.

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