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Housing and accommodation has become a major problem in many countries around the world. What are some of the main factors that have contributed to this problem? What can be done to help reduce the number of homeless people?

Housing and accommodation has become a major problem in many countries around the world. What are some of the main factors that have contributed to this problem? What can be done to help reduce the number of homeless people? qyY5
The increasing amount of people that cannot find affordable flats or houses in the modern world has been a cause of concern for some time. This essay will examine the main causes of the rising number of homeless people and possible solution to this problem. The two main causes of huge number of people without suitable living conditions are overpopulation and social problems such as drug addicted people. The human population is rising ftom year to year and as a result poverty increases in lots of overpopulated areas. It is clear, that when a vast majority of population cannot earn enough money to buy even food, they will not think about buying housing in the long term perspective. For example, it is not surprising, that the largest proportion of homeless are in countries like China and India, which are overpopulated. Also, drug addiction frequently makes people to leave their family and start living on the street. This is a big social issue when people do not have any aim in their life and just begging to buy a new portion of drugs. For instance, the recent study shows that one third of all hommles people are using narcotics and cannot support themselves financially. Some possible solution to these problems are providing a one chaild family policy and creating more reabilitation centres for drug adducted. By using a finantial penalty in the families that have more than one child we can reduce our population which will lead to more affordable accomodations to be built. Moreover, as large proportion of homeless people use drugs the goverments must organize more educational and medical facilities to help people in fighting with these epidemic. By acting in this direction we can definetly resolve problem with homeless people. To conclude, overpopulation and drug addiction increase th e number of people living on the street. However, we can significantly improve the situation by using a one chald policy and building more reabilitation facilites.
The increasing amount of
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people
that cannot find affordable flats or
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houses
in the modern world has been a cause of concern for
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some
time. This essay will examine the main causes of the rising number of
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homeless
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people
and possible solution to this problem.

The two main causes of huge number of
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people
without suitable living conditions are overpopulation and social problems such as
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drug
addicted
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people
. The human population is rising
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ftom
year to year and
as a result
poverty increases in lots of overpopulated areas. It is
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clear
, that when a vast majority of population cannot earn
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enough
money to
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buy
even food, they will not
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think
about buying housing in the long term perspective.
For example
, it is not surprising, that the largest proportion of
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homeless
are in countries like China and India, which
are overpopulated
.
Also
,
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drug
addiction
frequently
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makes
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people
to
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leave
their family and
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start
living on the street. This is a
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big
social issue when
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people
do not have any aim in their life and
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just
begging to
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buy
a new portion of
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drugs
.
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, the recent study
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shows
that one third of all
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hommles
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people
are using narcotics and cannot support themselves
financially
.

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possible solution to these problems are providing a one
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chaild
family policy and creating more
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reabilitation
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centres
for
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drug
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adducted
. By using a
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finantial
penalty in the families that have more than one child we can
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reduce
our population which will lead to more affordable
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accomodations
to
be built
.
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, as large proportion of
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homeless
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people
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use
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drugs
the
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goverments
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must
organize more educational and medical facilities to
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help
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people
in fighting with these epidemic. By acting in this direction we can
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definetly
resolve problem with
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homeless
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people
.

To conclude
, overpopulation and
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drug
addiction increase
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th e
number of
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people
living on the street.
However
, we can
significantly
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improve
the situation by using a one
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chald
policy and building more
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reabilitation
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facilites
.
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IELTS essay Housing and accommodation has become a major problem in many countries around the world. What are some of the main factors that have contributed to this problem? What can be done to help reduce the number of homeless people?

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  American English
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