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Many governments think that economic progress is their most important goal. Some people, however, think that other types of progress are equally important for a country. Discuss both views and give your opinion. v.14

Many governments think that economic progress is their most important goal. Some people, however, think that other types of progress are equally important for a country. v. 14
The process of developing socioeconomic standards and improving the lifestyle of the residents is measured in terms of progress of a country. In my opinion, there are many factors which contributed to the overall development of a state including economic values. (41) In ancient times, people had limited resources and led a very simple life. They had fewer occupations and lack of education. In short, people had very slow development rate in the past. (32) At present, it is doubtless that uplifting economy is a major goal of every government. However, the progress of a country is also seen by its development in Education, health and industrial sectors. In modern industrial regions of the world, the economy is considered the backbone of every government as the whole progress of a country is measured in terms of better economic conditions. While in developed and democratic countries, in addition to economic progress, governments also laid much stress to improve every sector like education, health, employment opportunities and social conditions. (92) The huge advancement in Science and Technology has revolutionized the whole world. The changing global scenario has forced the governments to focus on all the sectors individually that participated in the progress of a country as a whole. If the governments as well as people keep on moving forward to achieve their prosperity goals, then each country will be a progressed country in the near future. (54) In my opinion, the progress of a country is not only the improvements made in a particular field like economy, rather it is a team work of all the fields that joins hands in the overall development of a country. (40)
The process of developing socioeconomic standards and improving the lifestyle of the residents
is measured
in terms of
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progress
of a
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country
. In my opinion, there are
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many
factors which contributed to the
overall
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development
of a state including economic values. (41)

In ancient times,
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people
had limited resources and led a
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very
simple life. They had fewer occupations and lack of education. In short,
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people
had
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very
slow
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development
rate in the past. (32)

At present, it is doubtless that uplifting economy is a major goal of every
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government
.
However
, the
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progress
of a
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country
is
also
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seen
by its
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development
in Education, health and industrial sectors. In modern industrial regions of the world, the economy
is considered
the backbone of every
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government
as the whole
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progress
of a
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country
is measured
in terms of better economic conditions. While in developed and democratic
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countries
,
in addition
to economic
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progress
,
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governments
also
laid much
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stress
to
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improve
every sector like education, health, employment opportunities and social conditions. (92)

The huge advancement in Science and Technology has revolutionized the whole world. The changing global scenario has forced the
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governments
to focus on all the sectors
individually
that participated in the
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progress
of a
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country
as a whole. If the
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governments
as well
as
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people
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keep
on moving forward to achieve their prosperity goals, then each
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country
will be a progressed
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country
in the near future. (54)

In my opinion, the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
progress
of a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
country
is not
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
the improvements made in a particular field like economy,
rather
it is a team work of all the fields that
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joins
hands in the
overall
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
development
of a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
country
. (40)
9Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
24Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
0Mistakes
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IELTS essay Many governments think that economic progress is their most important goal. Some people, however, think that other types of progress are equally important for a country. v. 14

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
275 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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