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Many foods are shipped from far away Some people think that eating local food is more environmentally and economically Do you think the advantages outweigh its disadvantages v.2

Many foods are shipped from far away Some people think that eating local food is more environmentally and economically Do you think the advantages outweigh its disadvantages v. 2
It has been seen that now people have become more concerned about the food commuting due to the problems faced by this like pollution and overusuage of natural resources such as oil. Therefore, some people recommend that eating local food is more beneficial in terms of their health and environment. I also believe that eating local food provides enormous benefits to the individuals and society as a whole. This essay will discuss the benefits and drawbacks of shipping of food on people’s lives, economy and environment with conclusion. To begin with, there are immense benefits of eating food which is available local. First among of them, is health benefits. As fresh food comprises all the nutritional values as compared to the food which is available from the distance places because these foods lost its freshness while travelling. Hence, these foods not only lost its real taste, but also not good for their health. Furthermore, Travelling of food from other places leads to pollution and oil is also used such as, in planes, trucks, etc. Which further leads to many problems like traffic congestion and these resources will not be available for future generation. On the other hand, it has some cons. Firstly, when these food items shipped from other countries provide an opportunity to taste any kind of food without actually visiting that place. For example kiwi is a New Zealand food but, it is available all over the world due to this facility. Besides this, it also enhances jobs and boost the economy of the importing and exporting countries. Overall, it improves the trade and relations between the nations. In conclusion, although trading of food improves the economy of the nations. However, quality of life and environment cannot be overlooked. Thus, it is suggested that shipping of food should be facilitated only when it does not affects the lives of people.
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that
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now
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people
have become more concerned about the
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commuting due to the problems faced by this like pollution and
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overusuage
of natural resources such as oil.
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,
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some
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people
recommend that eating local
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food
is more beneficial in terms of their health and environment. I
also
believe that eating local
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food
provides enormous
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benefits
to the individuals and society as a whole. This essay will discuss the
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benefits
and drawbacks of shipping of
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food
on
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people’s
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lives
, economy and environment with conclusion.

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begin
with, there are immense
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benefits
of eating
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food
which is
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available
local.
First
among of them, is health
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benefits
. As fresh
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food
comprises all the nutritional values as compared to the
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food
which is
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available
from the distance places
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because
these
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foods
lost its freshness while travelling.
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foods
not
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lost its real taste,
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for their health.
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, Travelling of
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from other places leads to pollution and oil is
also
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used
such as, in
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planes
, trucks, etc. Which
further
leads to
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many
problems like traffic congestion and these resources will not be
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available
for future generation.

On the other hand
, it has
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some
cons.
Firstly
, when these
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food
items shipped from other countries provide an opportunity to taste any kind of
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food
without actually visiting that place.
For example
kiwi is a New Zealand
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food
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but
, it is
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available
all over the world due to this facility.
Besides
this, it
also
enhances jobs and boost the economy of the importing and exporting countries.
Overall
, it
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improves
the trade and relations between the nations.

In conclusion
, although trading of
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food
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improves
the economy of the nations.
However
, quality of life and environment cannot
be overlooked
.
Thus
, it
is suggested
that shipping of
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food
should
be facilitated
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only
when it does not
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the
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lives
of
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people
.
20Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
27Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes

IELTS essay Many foods are shipped from far away Some people think that eating local food is more environmentally and economically Do you think the advantages outweigh its disadvantages v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
312 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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