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Many foods are shipped from far away. Some people think that eating local food is more environmentally and economically. Do you think the advantages outweigh its disadvantages? v.8

Many foods are shipped from far away. Some people think that eating local food is more environmentally and economically. Do you think the advantages outweigh its disadvantages? v. 8
One of the most conspicuous trends in today's world is shipping eateries from abroad. Some people believe that purchasing domestic food items can improve the local economy. On the other hand, others argue that globalization has transformed the local market into the global market to serve native and foreign ingredients. As such, there are both merits and demerits for this trend and this essay will explain how the advantages can outweigh its disadvantages. Firstly, globalization has made world into one single network and migrants from other countries enjoy the luxury of availability of local spices through import and export business between countries. Furthermore, food is also part of the culture in many countries and people welcome new styles and ingredients to give their taste buds to new tastes. For instance, Indians enjoy eating rice with curries made of different ingredients and serve local migrants in overseas local goods are shipped to far away countries. Needless to say, by this exchange between local and global market can increase any country's economy. Secondly, another pivotal aspect is that every countries landscape and soil fertility differ from one country to another. Moreover, there are factors like climate, soil texture, and natural resources play a crucial role in not depending exclusively on local food crops. Similarly, domestic markets can benefit communal farmers, but a variety of crops may not be possible in some countries. For example, countries like Australia only can have 3 crops per annum, but countries like India can have 4 crops per annum. Hence, environmental conditions and availability of natural resources comes into action. In conclusion, one can clearly see that the proportion of advantages to shipping goods can outweigh the disadvantages of local products. Finally, the role of globalization is too dire to ignore.
One of the most conspicuous trends in
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today
's world is shipping eateries from abroad.
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Some
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people
believe that purchasing domestic food items can
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improve
the
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local
economy.
On the other hand
, others argue that globalization has transformed the
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local
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market
into the global
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market
to serve native and foreign ingredients. As such, there are both merits and demerits for this trend and this essay will
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explain
how the advantages can outweigh its disadvantages.

Firstly
, globalization has made world into one single network and migrants from other
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countries
enjoy the luxury of availability of
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local
spices through import and export business between
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countries
.
Furthermore
, food is
also
part of the culture in
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many
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countries
and
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people
welcome new styles and ingredients to give their taste buds to new tastes.
For instance
, Indians enjoy eating rice with curries made of
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different
ingredients and serve
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local
migrants in overseas
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local
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goods
are shipped
to far away
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countries
. Needless to say, by this exchange between
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local
and global
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market
can increase any country's economy.

Secondly
, another pivotal aspect is that every
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countries
landscape and soil fertility differ from one
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country
to another.
Moreover
, there are factors like climate, soil texture, and natural resources play a crucial role in not depending exclusively on
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local
food
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crops
.
Similarly
, domestic markets can benefit communal farmers,
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but
a variety of
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crops
may not be possible in
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some
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countries
.
For example
,
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countries
like Australia
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only
can have 3
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crops
per annum,
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but
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countries
like India can have 4
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crops
per annum.
Hence
, environmental conditions and availability of natural resources
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comes
into action.

In conclusion
, one can
clearly
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see
that the proportion of advantages to shipping
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goods
can outweigh the disadvantages of
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local
products.
Finally
, the role of globalization is too dire to
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ignore
.
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8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Many foods are shipped from far away. Some people think that eating local food is more environmentally and economically. Do you think the advantages outweigh its disadvantages? v. 8

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
294 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
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Lexical Resource: 8.0
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Grammatical Range: 8.0
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Task Achievement: 8.0
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