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Many employees are now required to wear a uniform as part of their company policy and this has many significant advantages. What is your viewpoint on this issue? Do the advantages of it outweigh the disadvantages? v.4

Many employees are now required to wear a uniform as part of their company policy and this has many significant advantages. What is your viewpoint on this issue? Do the advantages of it outweigh the disadvantages? v. 4
Today, wearing the uniform is becoming standard in almost all companies and organisations, especially manufacturing sectors. Some people think this move is good, whereas some think the opposite. I will discuss both the advantages and disadvantages of this, in below paragraphs. On the one hand, many companies like the nuclear plant, automobile manufacturing plant, fertiliser plant, refineries, often insist their employees wear a uniform. This has advantages, as workers feel united and make them deliver best results. The uniform is tailored in such a way that it will help the employees in emergency situations. Also, this type of uniform will promote the company brand when the customer sees them. In addition, customers will have a positive mindset about the company when they see employees in uniform. This will increase the company reputation in public as well as its growth. On the other hand, the specific tailoring method of the company uniform makes the employees feel discomfort. Sometimes, this type of stitching doesn't suit some employees’ physical appearance. This will result in the lack of concentrations of employees on their job, which in turn result in the decline in company performance. In some cases, people resign from their job for this reason only. This increase in attrition rate will result in companies’ negative growth, as it is difficult to hire skilled personnel easily. To sum up, I feel that strict rule for wearing a uniform in companies is not fair. Before implementing a uniform, a company should take opinion from their employees and consider their suggestions. Also, the company should explain the benefits of the uniform to their employees. In this way, both companies and employees’ thought will be respected.
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companies
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organisations
,
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people
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is
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good
, whereas
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the opposite. I will discuss both the advantages and disadvantages of this, in below paragraphs.

On the one hand,
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many
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companies
like the nuclear plant, automobile manufacturing plant,
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fertiliser
plant, refineries,
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often
insist their
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employees
wear a
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uniform
. This has advantages, as workers feel united and
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make
them deliver best
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results
. The
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uniform
is tailored
in such a way that it will
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help
the
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employees
in emergency situations.
Also
, this type of
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uniform
will promote the
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company
brand when the customer
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sees
them.
In addition
, customers will have a
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positive
mindset about the
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company
when they
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see
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employees
in
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uniform
. This will increase the
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company
reputation in public
as well
as its growth.

On the other hand
, the specific tailoring method of the
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company
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uniform
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makes
the
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employees
feel discomfort.
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Sometimes
, this type of stitching doesn't suit
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some
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employees’
physical appearance. This will
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result
in the lack of concentrations of
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employees
on their job, which in turn
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result
in the decline in
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company
performance. In
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some
cases,
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people
resign from their job
for this reason
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only
. This increase in attrition rate will
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result
in
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companies’
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negative
growth, as it is difficult to hire skilled personnel
easily
.

To sum up, I feel that strict
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rule
for wearing a
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uniform
in
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companies
is not
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fair
.
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Before
implementing a
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uniform
, a
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company
should take opinion from their
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employees
and consider their suggestions.
Also
, the
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company
should
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explain
the benefits of the
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uniform
to their
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employees
. In this way, both
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companies
and
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employees’
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thought
will
be respected
.
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34Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Many employees are now required to wear a uniform as part of their company policy and this has many significant advantages. What is your viewpoint on this issue? Do the advantages of it outweigh the disadvantages? v. 4

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
279 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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