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many elderly people are no longer looked after their families but are putting care home and nursing homes does this development has more advantages than its possible disadvantage

many elderly people are no longer looked after their families but are putting care home and nursing homes does this development has more advantages than its possible disadvantage XGqVr
The knowledge and experience of elder one is precious and it is very costly as gold. In the modern era there are so many elderly home, which has certain advantages and disadvantages. In my view aged people need to be cared in their own home environment. One of the major point of retirement home is that it reduce that time spend for the elders owing to be the fact that there is no time for the family members to take care elders because of their work schedule and busy life. Another benefit for the severely elder one who get adequate healthcare, safety and security in the nursing homes rather than from the home environment. In spite of this advantages, which has some drawbacks also. elder people in the old age homes have no any freedom they are restricted to a four corner building and they are not emotionally stable. In home they are happy with their children and grandchildren. Another detrimental effect is that they have some likes and dislikes in their food habits and rituals but it should not considered in care centres and also the force to follow the institutions policies. These all are dissatisfaction to them. In addition to that if they have the ability to think and adequate memory is left there, the thought they are burden to their children and the loneliness of them in the old age home make them a depressed one. in summary the old age homes are essential in the modern life because of the busy life of the youth, Paris there is a right to the elder one to be kept by their family members. Their sweat made this youth as like this, so in my personal opinion the elder one should be cared by their families and don't forget the fact that one day you will become an older one.
The knowledge and experience of
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one is precious and it is
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costly as gold. In the modern era there are
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elderly home, which has certain advantages and disadvantages. In my view aged
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people
need to
be cared
in their
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own
home environment.

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reduce
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elders
owing to be the fact that there is no time for the family members to take care
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because
of their work schedule and busy life. Another benefit for the
severely
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one who
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get
adequate healthcare, safety and security in the nursing
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rather
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advantages, which has
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drawbacks
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elder
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people
in the
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age
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have
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no
any freedom they
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to a four corner
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building and
they are not
emotionally
stable. In
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are happy with their children and grandchildren. Another detrimental effect is that they have
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likes and dislikes in their food habits and rituals
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the force to follow the institutions policies. These all are dissatisfaction to them.
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to that if they have the ability to
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think
and adequate memory is
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left
there, the
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thought
they are burden to their children and the loneliness of them in the
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old
age home
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make
them a depressed one.

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in
summary the
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old
age
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homes
are essential in the modern life
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because
of the busy life of the youth, Paris there is a right to the
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one to be
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kept
by their family members. Their sweat made this youth as like this,
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so
in my personal opinion the
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one should
be cared
by their families and don't forget the fact that one day you will become an older one.
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IELTS essay many elderly people are no longer looked after their families but are putting care home and nursing homes does this development has more advantages than its possible disadvantage

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
311 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.0
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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