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Many elderly people are no longer looked after by their families but are put in care homes or nursing homes. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this trend? v.3

The most obvious fruitfull for side of sending old family members to Care Centres is that it mainly focused on proper care. In other words senior citizens cannot take only quality food, medical treatment on time, but this nursing homes also provide them a source of entertainment like televisions, soft Music and so on. As a result they become familiar with these old age homes. In addition to this, another pros for family is that they can do any work without restrictions. It is to say that it is Ivy table that mostly and her family members stop and give advice at every matter to other members of family and maybe they seems elders obsticles. Resulting, other members can get freedom. On the gloomy side of the situation these nursing homes probably quite expensive. To justify, including food cost, medical cost, cloth cost and other expenses of Care Centre, to sum all of them it is not a good deal of benefit. Becouse undoubtedly it leads in soaring of monthly charges which will be paid by elder's family due to which family can become financially weak. Moreover, it is ignorable that nowadays both parents do work and because of that they become unable to teach their young ones moral values. So, at this stage only elder members of family can help them. Eventually in the absence of good talks about society or good morals, kids become unpredictably mysterious and can face personality disorders in future. To encapsulate, it is not good to put elders in old age care centres, in fact we have to take care of them in proper manner at home. It will be beneficial for people as well as their off springs.
The most obvious
fruitfull
for side of sending
old
family
members
to
Care
Centres
is that it
mainly
focused on proper
care
. In
other
words senior citizens cannot take
only
quality food, medical treatment on time,
but
this nursing
homes
also
provide them a source of entertainment like televisions, soft Music and
so
on.
As
a result they
become
familiar with these
old
age
homes
.
In addition
to this, another pros for
family
is that they can do any work without restrictions. It is to say that it is Ivy table that
mostly
and her
family
members
stop
and give advice at every matter to
other
members
of
family and
maybe they
seems
elders
obsticles
. Resulting,
other
members
can
get
freedom.

On the gloomy side of the situation these nursing
homes
probably
quite expensive. To justify, including food cost, medical cost, cloth cost and
other
expenses of
Care
Centre
, to sum all of them it is not a
good
deal of benefit.
Becouse
undoubtedly
it leads in soaring of monthly charges which will
be paid
by elder's
family
due to which
family
can
become
financially
weak.
Moreover
, it is ignorable that nowadays both parents do work and
because
of that they
become
unable to teach their young ones moral values.
So
, at this stage
only
elder
members
of
family
can
help
them.
Eventually
in the absence of
good
talks about society or
good
morals, kids
become
unpredictably
mysterious and can face personality disorders
in future
.

To encapsulate, it is not
good
to put elders in
old
age
care
centres
, in fact we
have to
take
care
of them in proper manner at home. It will be beneficial for
people
as well
as their off springs.
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IELTS academic Many elderly people are no longer looked after by their families but are put in care homes or nursing homes but are the advantages and disadvantages of this Trend.

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