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Many countries aim to improve their living standard by BK development but some important social values are lost as a result do you think the advantage of economic development outweigh the disadvantages

Many countries aim to improve their living standard by BK development but some important social values are lost as a result do you think the advantage of economic development outweigh the disadvantages n61YR
Nowadays people of all nations are busy in different words for earning money many countries want to improve their life style with the help of economic development and they are for getting some social values this essay will explain both advantages and disadvantages of commercial development in upcoming paragraphs. At the outset there are some disadvantages of economic development and some prominent to draw of economic growth is anti social behaviour in individuals for example everyone want to earn money more and more that is why they are doing jobs for on different places and they are living away from their homes for these reasons they have no time for their offspring and old people if they do not pay attention on their children they would indulge in Barak Tibet is therefore development of economic importance negative impact on society.
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people
of all nations are busy in
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different
words for earning money
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many
countries want to
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improve
their life style with the
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help
of
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economic
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development and
they are for getting
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some
social values this essay will
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explain
both advantages and disadvantages of commercial
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development
in upcoming paragraphs.

At the outset there are
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some
disadvantages of
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economic
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development
and
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some
prominent to draw of
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economic
growth is
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anti social
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behaviour
in individuals
for example
everyone
The pronoun 'everyone' is usually used with a third-person or a past tense verb: "wants", "wanted".
want
to earn money more and more
that is
why they are doing jobs for on
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different
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places and
they are living away from their homes for these reasons they have no time for their offspring and
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old
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people
if they do not pay attention on their children they would indulge in
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Barak
Tibet is
therefore
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development
of
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economic
importance
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negative
impact on society.

IELTS essay Many countries aim to improve their living standard by BK development but some important social values are lost as a result do you think the advantage of economic development outweigh the disadvantages

Essay
  American English
2 paragraphs
140 words
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4.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 5.5
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