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describe the changes in the park 9L6qw
The given plans demonstrate how a science park has changed since 2008. Overall, Research and Development area has been added to the north-west of the park, where was grassland in 2008. In 2008, there was a reception next to the office, but it has been removed and a university hub has been structured in its place. The Business Unit has been kept at its original place. The car park, which is located in the center of the park, has been partly demolished. Cyber Security has been expanded drastically to the road in the middle. A bus stop has been added to the eastern side of the park. Also, a train station has been built in the south, which has been linked to the park by a path. IT Centre has been renamed as Innovation Centre. A cycle path has been constructed all around the science park. All in all, the park has significantly developed over time.
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plans demonstrate how a science
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park
has
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changed
since 2008.

Overall
, Research and Development area has been
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added
to the north-west of the
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park
, where was grassland in 2008. In 2008, there was a reception
next
to the office,
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but
it has
been removed
and a university hub has
been structured
in its place. The Business Unit has been
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kept
at its original place. The car
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park
, which
is located
in the center of the
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park
, has been partly demolished. Cyber Security has
been expanded
drastically
to the road in the middle. A bus
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stop
has been
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added
to the eastern side of the
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park
.
Also
, a train station has
been built
in the south, which has
been linked
to the
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park
by a path. IT
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Centre
has
been renamed
as Innovation
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Centre
. A cycle path has
been constructed
all around the science park.

All in all, the
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park
has
significantly
developed over time.

IELTS essay describe the changes in the park

Essay
  American English
3 paragraphs
156 words
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4.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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