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Many countries aim to improve their living standard by BK development but some important social values are lost as a result do you think the advantage of economic development outweigh the disadvantages

Many countries aim to improve their living standard by BK development but some important social values are lost as a result do you think the advantage of economic development outweigh the disadvantages RNwPM
Nowadays people of all nations are busy in different words for earning money many countries want to improve their life style with the help of economic development and they are for getting some social values this essay will explain both advantages and disadvantages of commercial development in upcoming paragraphs. At the outset there are some disadvantages of economic development and some prominent to draw of economic growth is anti social behaviour in individuals for example everyone want to earn money more and more that is why they are doing jobs for on different places and they are living away from their homes for these reasons they have no time for their offspring and old people if they do not pay attention on their children they would indulge in Barak Tibet is therefore development of economic importance negative impact on society. On the other hand there are various advantages of economic growth firstly government provide many facilities to masses like education Medical and job opportunities with the help of financial growth unemployment and crimes can be reduced to from nation for example should individual have work for earning they can buy basic things for fulfilling their needs and they will ignore to crimes. Moving further government also give internet and good education facilities to people due to battery economic development hands commercial growth help to country for improving Living Style To conclude are the advantages of economic development are more than disadvantages people cannot ignore negative impact of that government should the fix working are so that individuals could spend their time with others.
Nowadays
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people
of all nations are busy in
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different
words for earning money
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many
countries want to
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improve
their life style with the
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help
of
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economic
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development and
they are for getting
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some
social values this essay will
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explain
both advantages and disadvantages of commercial
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development
in upcoming paragraphs.

At the outset there are
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some
disadvantages of
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economic
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development
and
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some
prominent to draw of
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economic
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growth
is
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anti social
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behaviour
in individuals
for example
everyone
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want
to earn money more and more
that is
why they are doing jobs for on
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different
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places and
they are living away from their homes for these reasons they have no time for their offspring and
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old
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people
if they do not pay attention on their children they would indulge in
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Barak
Tibet is
therefore
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development
of
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economic
importance
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negative
impact on society.

On the other hand
there are various advantages of
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economic
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growth
firstly
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government
provide
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many
facilities to masses like education Medical and job opportunities with the
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help
of financial
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growth
unemployment and crimes can be
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reduced
to from nation
for example
should individual have work for earning they can
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buy
basic things for fulfilling their
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needs and
they will
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ignore
to crimes.

Moving
further
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government
also
give internet and
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good
education facilities to
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people
due to battery
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economic
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development
hands commercial
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growth
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help
to country for improving Living Style

To conclude
are the advantages of
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economic
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development
are more than disadvantages
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people
cannot
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ignore
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negative
impact of that
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government
should the
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fix
working are
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so
that individuals could spend their time with others.
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IELTS essay Many countries aim to improve their living standard by BK development but some important social values are lost as a result do you think the advantage of economic development outweigh the disadvantages

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
263 words
5.5
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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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