Do you want to improve your writing? Try our new evaluation service and get detailed feedback.
Check Your Text it's free

Many companies sponsor a games these days to advertise themselves . Some people say that it has many advantages other opine that it has many disadvantage . Discuss both point of views and give your own opinion.

Many companies sponsor a games these days to advertise themselves. Some people say that it has many advantages other opine that it has many disadvantage. N851g
It is now a trend for many big MNCs to use sports games to advertise their brand and products. It is believed by some people that it is beneficial but on the other hand some take it as a drawback. Firstly, sponsoring companies vare promoting their brand as well as they are helping clubs and players to achieve success in the field of sports because money is important in all sectors. For example, if a player is not supported financially by someone, he can not focus on his training and development. Due to this reason only some countries like Pakistan, Nepal lack in many sports games. Companies get benefit from viewers or followers of sports, fans usually like to buy product of the company who has sponsored their favourite team. For example, in Mumbai, india, there is an increase in the sales of jio smartphones because they sponsor Mumbai National cricket team. On the other side it is believed by some people that it has many drawbacks too, which is completely right because in some cases sports events aur manipulated by sponsors, which leads to the demotivation among players and secondly players are forced to advertise deceptive information of their products, it harms the image of the player as well as team. Sometimes it also becomes controversial for players to support some products like a player was charged to advertise on healthy product, frequently they lose fans to but companies do not care about that To conclude, I would like to say that it has demerits but, it is much more beneficial for Players. we should be aware of what we are following it will be beneficial for us.
It is
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
now
a trend for
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
big
Possible spelling mistake found.
MNCs
to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
sports
games to advertise their brand and
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
products
. It
is believed
by
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
that it is beneficial
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
on the other hand
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
take it as a drawback.

Firstly
, sponsoring
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
companies
Possible spelling mistake found.
vare
promoting their brand
as well
as they are helping clubs and
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
players
to achieve success in the field of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
sports
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
money is
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
important
in all sectors.
For example
, if a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
player
is not supported
financially
by someone, he can not focus on his training and development. Due to this reason
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
countries like Pakistan, Nepal lack in
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
sports
games.
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
Companies
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
benefit from viewers or followers of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
sports
, fans
usually
like to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
buy
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
product
of the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
company
who has sponsored their
Possible spelling mistake. 'favourite' is British English.
favourite
team.
For example
, in Mumbai,
Possible spelling mistake found.
india
, there is an increase in the sales of
Possible spelling mistake found.
jio
smartphones
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
they sponsor Mumbai National cricket team.

On the other side it
is believed
by
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
that it has
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
drawbacks too, which is completely right
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
in
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
cases
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
sports
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
events
Possible spelling mistake found.
aur
manipulated by sponsors, which leads to the
Possible spelling mistake found.
demotivation
among
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
players
and
secondly
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
players
are forced
to advertise deceptive information of their
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
products
, it harms the image of the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
player
as well
as team.
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
Sometimes
it
also
becomes controversial for
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
players
to support
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
products
like a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
player
was charged
to advertise on healthy
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
product
,
frequently
they lose fans to
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
companies
do not care about that

To conclude
, I would like to say that it has demerits
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
, it is much more beneficial for
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
Players
.
This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
we
should be aware of what we are following it will be beneficial for us.
What do you think?
  • This is funny writingFunny
  • I love this writingLove
  • This writing has blown my mindWow
  • It made me angryAngry
  • It made me sadSad

IELTS essay Many companies sponsor a games these days to advertise themselves. Some people say that it has many advantages other opine that it has many disadvantage.

Essay
  American English
3 paragraphs
279 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
Labels Descriptions
  • ?
    Currently is not available
  • Meet the criteria
  • Doesn't meet the criteria
Recent posts