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Many claim it is extremely possible to decode cultures and behaviours of people based on their sense of dressing.

Many claim it is extremely possible to decode cultures and behaviours of people based on their sense of dressing. AwdJN
Many claim it is extremely possible to decode cultures and behaviours of people based on their sense of dressing. Although, cultural can be represented in the type of clothing a person puts on but definitely not character. Thus, I totally disagree with the above notion. This essay will discuss how choice of clothings can not be used as a prerogative for judging the origin of people in terms of their culture and their behaviours. To begin, the main reason proponent to the above assertions hold on to such believe is because fashion is a major distinctive feature of culture, and most times defines behavioural patterns. For instance, Nigeria houses people of about 80 ethnic groups, and the primary way individuals from different culture can easily be recognised is by what they put on; which most times tells volume about their character due long standing historical records. However, nowadays, it is common to see people wearing outfits from different cultures which does not in any way depict their countries of origin but rather reflect their specs. Nigerians for example, are fond of putting on clothings from another cultures particularly those of western designers. Thus, sense of outfit does not speak about cultures but rather personal choices. With regards to characters; there is no correlation between how a person chooses to dress to how they behave. For the fact, that an individual decides to put on outfits that is not of their origin does not show how their behaviours are but rather character is something that is has been formed and imbibed over time. The environment such as nature of family principles, and external factors are what forms and determines person’s characters and undoubtedly not what they wear. In conclusion, though people may feel that what we put on is a pointer to our cultural identity and character, nonetheless, the above notion is obviously world apart. That means, what we put on should not be used to tell where we are from, and our behaviours.
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character
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disagree with the above notion. This essay will discuss how choice of
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clothings can
not be
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used
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people
in terms of their
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culture
and their
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behaviours
.

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, the main reason proponent to the above assertions hold on to such
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believe
is
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because
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culture
, and most times defines
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behavioural
patterns.
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, Nigeria
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people
of about 80 ethnic groups, and the primary way individuals from
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culture
can
easily
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put
on; which most times
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tells
volume about their
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character
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long standing
historical records.

However
, nowadays, it is common to
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people
wearing outfits from
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cultures
which does not in any way depict their countries of origin
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but
rather
reflect their specs. Nigerians
for example
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clothings
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cultures
particularly
those of western designers.
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cultures
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but
rather
personal choices.

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characters
; there is no correlation between how a person chooses to dress to how they behave. For the fact, that an individual decides to
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put
on outfits
that is
not of their origin does not
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show
how their
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behaviours
are
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but
rather
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character
is something
that is
has
been formed
and imbibed over time. The environment such as nature of family principles, and external factors are what forms and determines person’s
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characters
and
undoubtedly
not what they wear.

In conclusion
, though
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people
may feel that what we
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put
on is a pointer to our cultural identity and
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character
, nonetheless, the above notion is
obviously
world apart. That means, what we
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put
on should not be
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used
to
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tell
where we are from, and our
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behaviours
.
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IELTS essay Many claim it is extremely possible to decode cultures and behaviours of people based on their sense of dressing.

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  American English
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333 words
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