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Many big cities in Vietnam are facing air pollution now. What we should do to solve this problem?

Many big cities in Vietnam are facing air pollution now. What we should do to solve this problem? 56aMP
Most of modern cities in Vietnam where everything goes mechanised and rate of population is so high have poor AQIs, especially in Hanoi. Bad atmosphere do harm to city dwellers' health and cause lots of advantages as it results in climate change. To solve this problem, I think all of us have to change our bad daily habits that make the air state lower and lower. Firstly, changing from private vehicles (car and motorbike) to public ones like bus or non-fuel ones like bike is highly recommended. According to statistics, transportation emissions are top air-pollutants, so cut down on diesel and petrol vehicles definitely works. But in Vietnam, a traffic tradition so-called "motorbike tradition" which have surprised every foreigners coming here is hard to break but it worths. Secondly, many people always litter and even burn the bag of gabbage, dried leaves adn nilon bag sometimes, which creates smell and toxic gases. Someone might suggest a fine for this action if detected, but I'm totally against that. In reality, an small fine is not enough to stop them litter and burn household waste. Instead, we should make the littered areas more beautiful by decorating and planting flowers. I suggest the funny draws and trendy flowers, daisy for example. This will conjure a sense of beauty respect that we don't want to destroy those gorgoeus areas and stop litter there. Our harmful environmentally habits such as using diesel and petrol vehicles and litters and burning things are ruining the main source of our lives, but habit can be break. Think and act for the air!
Most of modern cities in Vietnam where everything goes
mechanised
and rate of population is
so
high have poor
AQIs
,
especially
in Hanoi.
Bad
atmosphere do harm to city dwellers' health and cause lots of advantages as it results in climate
change
. To solve this problem, I
think
all of us
have to
change
our
bad
daily habits that
make
the air state lower and lower.
Firstly
, changing from private vehicles (car and motorbike) to public ones like bus or non-fuel ones like bike is
highly
recommended. According to statistics, transportation emissions are top air-pollutants,
so
cut
down on diesel and petrol vehicles definitely works.
But
in Vietnam, a traffic tradition
so
-called
"
motorbike tradition
"
which have surprised every foreigners coming here is
hard
to break
but
it
worths
.
Secondly
,
many
people
always
litter
and even burn the bag of
gabbage
, dried
leaves
adn
nilon
bag
sometimes
, which creates smell and toxic gases. Someone might suggest a fine for this action if detected,
but
I'm
totally
against that. In reality,
an
small
fine is not
enough
to
stop
them
litter
and burn household waste.
Instead
, we should
make
the littered areas more
beautiful
by decorating and planting flowers. I suggest the
funny
draws and trendy flowers, daisy
for example
. This will conjure a sense of beauty respect that we don't want to
destroy
those
gorgoeus
areas and
stop
litter
there. Our harmful
environmentally
habits such as using diesel and petrol vehicles and
litters
and burning things are ruining the main source of our
lives
,
but
habit can be break.
Think
and act for the air!
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IELTS essay Many big cities in Vietnam are facing air pollution now. What we should do to solve this problem?

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