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Many  are no longer looked after by their families but are put in care homes or . What are the advantages and disadvantages of this trend?

It is increasingly common for families to send their elderly relatives to live in nursing homes, rather than take care of them at home. This essay will highlight some of the benefits and drawbacks that have resulted from this switch. Looking firstly at the positives, a significant advantage is that care homes are often much better equipped to deal with the demands of elderly people than family homes. For example, nursing homes do not usually have stairs, and for those which do, stairlifts or elevators need to be installed. This means that the typical mobility problems which tend to appear among geriatrics are not exacerbated. Not only this, but the staff who work at nursing homes have been professionally trained to manage the needs of the elderly. It is rare for family members to possess these skills. However, care homes for the elderly also present some disadvantages, the most obvious of which is the lack of loved ones around. Although it is possible for friends and relatives to visit nursing home residents, these visits can be infrequent, and loneliness is often the consequence. To make matters worse, it has been shown that those who are lonely are at greater risk of becoming depressed and having their immune system weakened. Furthermore, care home residents are often surrounded by illness and death. Such an environment is likely to curtail happiness and trigger severe depression. In conclusion, despite the benefits of specially-trained staff and well-equipped facilities that nursing homes can offer the elderly, the drawbacks of loneliness and its concomitant depression should also be taken into consideration.
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increasingly
common for families to
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send
their
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elderly
relatives to
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live
in nursing
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homes
,
rather
than take
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care
of them at home. This essay will highlight
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some of the
benefits and drawbacks that have resulted from this switch.

Looking
firstly
at the positives, a significant advantage is that
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care
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homes
are
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often
much better equipped to deal with the demands of
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elderly
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people
than family
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homes
.
For example
, nursing
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homes
do not
usually
have stairs, and for those which do,
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stairlifts
or elevators need to
be installed
. This means that the typical mobility problems which tend to appear among geriatrics are not exacerbated. Not
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only
this,
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but
the staff who work at nursing
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homes
have been
professionally
trained to manage the needs of the
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elderly
. It is rare for family members to possess these
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skills
.

However
,
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care
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homes
for the
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elderly
also
present
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some
disadvantages, the most obvious of which is the lack of
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loved
ones around. Although it is possible for friends and relatives to visit nursing home residents, these visits can be infrequent, and loneliness is
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often
the consequence. To
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make
matters worse, it has
been shown
that those who are lonely are at greater
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risk
of becoming depressed and having their immune system weakened.
Furthermore
,
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care
home residents are
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often
surrounded by illness and death. Such an environment is likely to curtail happiness and trigger severe depression.

In conclusion
, despite the benefits of
specially
-trained staff and well-equipped facilities that nursing
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homes
can offer the
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elderly
, the drawbacks of loneliness and its concomitant depression should
also
be taken
into consideration.
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IELTS essay Many  are no longer looked after by their families but are put in care homes or. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this trend?

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
264 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
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    Present relevant ideas
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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