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Make notes on the key changes in the following areas

Make notes on the key changes in the following areas KWgQ1
The two pictures compare the layout of the town of Fosbury in 1980 and 35 years later in 2015. At first glance, it is clear that there had been more infrastructure and develops in residential, industrial spheres in that years. In 1980 there was old-fashioned food store in the north of the town. However, in 2015 it was modernized and was located to the east. As well, Recreational buildings had been changed by 2015. Tennis courts were expanded to the Sports center. And the center were replaced with tennis courts. Furthermore, terraced houses were also changed their place from the north-east to the west. In 1980 there was an apartment building in the center of the town but coming to 2015 it was torn down. In 2015 industrial buildings were erected. For example, warehouses appeared in the south-east of the town. Some notable changes in 2015 was car parks. They were erected in two parts of the town. In addition, the straight road in the center was modernized. In 2015 roundabout road replaced with straight road. And there were constructed 2 new roads in the town in 2015.
The two pictures compare the layout of the
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Fosbury
in 1980 and 35 years later in 2015. At
first
glance, it is
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clear
that there had been more infrastructure and develops in residential, industrial spheres in that years.

In 1980 there was
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old
-fashioned food store in the north of the
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town
.
However
, in 2015 it
was modernized
and
was located
to the east.
As well
, Recreational buildings had been
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changed
by 2015. Tennis courts
were expanded
to the Sports center. And the center
were replaced
with tennis courts.
Furthermore
, terraced
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houses
were
also
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changed
their place from the north-east to the west.

In 1980 there was an apartment building in the center of the
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town
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but
coming to 2015 it
was torn
down. In 2015 industrial buildings
were erected
.
For example
, warehouses appeared in the south-east of the
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town
.
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Some
notable
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changes
in 2015 was car parks. They
were erected
in two parts of the town.

In addition
, the straight
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road
in the center
was modernized
. In 2015 roundabout
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road
replaced with straight
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road
. And there
were constructed
2 new
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roads
in the
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town
in 2015.
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IELTS essay Make notes on the key changes in the following areas

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