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Majority of individuals opine that Authority ought to banned harmful sports, whereas opponent deem that they need to have liberty to select their favorite sports.

Majority of individuals opine that Authority ought to banned harmful sports, whereas opponent deem that they need to have liberty to select their favorite sports. eYxO
Majority of individuals opine that Authority ought to banned harmful sports, whereas opponent deem that they need to have liberty to select their favorite sports. In this essay I intend to delve both in the next crumb of writing. To embark with, there are plethora of reasons that bolsters the view that, why legal bodies ought to harmful activities. First And Foremost, everyone knows that nothing is more than life. Some masses do dangerous stunts on hilly areas as well as in sea. It is put detrimental impact on their life. Due to this, they lost their lives and facing the death. For instance, a survey conduct by prestigious newspaper of the United States of America reveals that 45% of individuals lost their lives in dangerous activities so that’s why ministry need to banned that types of games. On the flip side of the coin, no doubt there are some bad factors of dangerous sports but there are also some propitious factors also. Firstly, there are a million’s of masses lived in every country, and they have right to choose their favorite activities. If authority forced to individuals for choose one particular activity then they do not perform well as compare to their favorite sports. For example, the famous football player named as Cristiano Ronaldo firstly he chose cricket under the pressure of their family but they do not play well in cricket. But he had great in trust in football and nowadays he is included in top three footballers. So that’s why it is necessary for individuals choose sports with their own wish. In conclusion, although everyone had right to choose their favorite activity, and they achieve success in it but nothing is more than life and Authority provide the best information to native individuals which is propitious for everyone.
Majority of
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opine that Authority ought to banned harmful
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sports
, whereas opponent deem that they need to have liberty to select their
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favorite
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sports
. In this essay I intend to delve both in the
next
crumb of writing. To embark with, there are plethora of reasons that bolsters the view that, why legal bodies ought to harmful
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activities
.
First
And Foremost, everyone knows that nothing is more than life.
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Some
masses do
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dangerous
stunts on hilly areas
as well
as in sea. It
is put
detrimental impact on their life. Due to this, they lost their
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lives
and facing the death.
For instance
, a survey conduct by prestigious newspaper of the United States of America reveals that 45% of
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individuals
lost their
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lives
in
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dangerous
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activities
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so
that’s why ministry need to banned that types of games. On the flip side of the coin, no doubt there are
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some
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bad
factors of
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dangerous
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sports
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but
there are
also
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some
propitious factors
also
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, there are a million’s of masses
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lived
in every country, and they have right to
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choose
their
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favorite
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activities
. If authority forced to
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individuals
for
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choose
one particular
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activity
then they do not perform well as compare to their
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favorite
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sports
.
For example
, the
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famous
football player named as Cristiano Ronaldo
firstly
he chose cricket under the pressure of their family
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but
they do not play well in cricket.
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But
he had great in trust in football and nowadays he
is included
in top three footballers.
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So
that’s why it is necessary for
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individuals
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choose
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sports
with their
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own
wish.
In conclusion
, although everyone had right to
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choose
their
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favorite
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activity
, and they achieve success in it
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but
nothing is more than life and Authority provide the best information to native
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individuals
which is propitious for everyone.
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IELTS essay Majority of individuals opine that Authority ought to banned harmful sports, whereas opponent deem that they need to have liberty to select their favorite sports.

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  American English
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301 words
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