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Living in close contact with nature is important for our physical and mental wellbeing . Why do people not keep adequate contact with nature these days ? Suggest solution

Living in close contact with nature is important for our physical and mental wellbeing. Why do people not keep adequate contact with nature these days? Suggest solution eABAV
It is true that humans are getting far from nature. Living in a near contact with nature is vital for the physical strength and mental power, nowadys individuals are not having a good contact with earth resources. I opine that due to increase in settlement in cities for work is the primary reason behind lossing connection with nature but also these have some solutions, which will be discussed in the forthcoming pragrphs of the essay. Commencing with reasons, which are several but the prominent one is settlement to big cities which are far from mother nature. In other words, folks who are living in a rural areas are close to nature but when they leave their homeland for the work, they easily gets far from the nature due to fact of cities are not near the natural creations, they have face more health complications. For instance, a survey was conducted between folks living in cities and villages by the students of Yale University of America, which revealed that masses who are living in cities and does not have any interaction with nature are struggling with more health hassles and also they are not strong as people living in a rural areas; therefore nature gives us everthing naturaly because nowadays everthing is made from artificial substances, which is hazardous to the health. On the other hand, every lock has a key, there are some solutions but primary one is to take a short trip to the natural place to feel good by keeping the work load at side. To elaborate, individuals who are working in major cities have to travel long distance to feel the nature. Moreover, if they spare the the time on the weekends and go for a short trip to jungle and mountains, they will feel more stressed out from wories of the life. I think it is the best option to stay fit mentally and physically. To conclude, although there are reasons like people living in cities not have much natural places to visit but solutions like planning a short trips on weekends, surely help them to make them more healthy and fit.
It is true that humans are getting far from
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nature
.
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Living
in a near contact with
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nature
is vital for the physical strength and mental power,
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nowadys
individuals are not having a
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good
contact with earth resources. I opine that due to increase in settlement in
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cities
for work is the primary reason behind
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lossing
connection with
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nature
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but
also
these have
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some
solutions, which will
be discussed
in the forthcoming
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pragrphs
of the essay.

Commencing with reasons, which are several
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but
the prominent one is settlement to
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big
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cities
which are far from mother
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nature
.
In other words
, folks who are
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living
in a rural
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areas
are close to
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nature
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but
when they
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leave
their homeland for the work, they
easily
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gets
far from the
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nature
due to fact of
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cities
are not near the natural creations, they have
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face
more health complications.
For instance
, a survey
was conducted
between folks
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living
in
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cities
and villages by the students of Yale University of America, which revealed that masses who are
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living
in
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cities
and does not have any interaction with
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nature
are struggling with more health hassles and
also
they are not strong as
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people
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living
in a rural
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areas
;
therefore
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nature
gives us
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everthing
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naturaly
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because
nowadays
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everthing
is made
from artificial substances, which is hazardous to the health.

On the other hand
, every lock has a key, there are
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some
solutions
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but
primary one is to take a short trip to the natural place to feel
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good
by keeping the work load at side. To elaborate, individuals who are working in major
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cities
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have to
travel long distance to feel the
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nature
.
Moreover
, if they spare
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the the
time on the weekends and go for a short trip to jungle and mountains, they will feel more
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stressed
out from
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wories
of the life. I
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think
it is the best option to stay fit mentally and
physically
.

To conclude
, although there are reasons like
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people
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living
in
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cities
not have much natural places to visit
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but
solutions like planning a short trips on weekends,
surely
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help
them to
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make
them more healthy and fit.
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IELTS essay Living in close contact with nature is important for our physical and mental wellbeing. Why do people not keep adequate contact with nature these days? Suggest solution

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
356 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 6.0
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