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Living in another country

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Starting a new life abroad had been a dream since I was a child, and I used to travel with my family around many countries. When I was in my last year in university, during my internship. I instantly bonded with Mike, an Australian physiotherapist. His uncle Brian launched a private medical center and was looking for some people to hire. I saw an opportunity to make my dream come true. Mike and I went to Melbourne to visit Brian, and I did an informal interview. I had just graduated, and he doubted if it would be a good idea. Therefore, Brian told me, that I could start as an internship period for 6 months, and then we will talk. I came back home, but I had a concrete plan, after visiting Melbourne, I feel that I need to change of scenery. I’ve been living in a small village and had a job lined up, for 6 months but if I don’t stay working there, I will look for another job, wherever, but I fell in love with Melbourne. In September, I moved to Melbourne, I was living in a cramped apartment next to Brian’s medical center. I was excited to start fresh. Mike helps me to immerse myself in my new city, I met his friends, he shows me the lifestyle. I started to work and was very excited, everything was going well, I loved my job and I feel fine with my colleges. But at night I used to feel homesick, I keep in contact daily with my family and friends. But after a hard day, I missed being with Nataly to cheer me up, only she knows how to do it. After finishing my internship, Brian offered me to be the chief of my department. I became a confident person for him. I used to solve every issue and if I need to give an extra minute, I did. All my colleges accepted my new change. My parents were extremely proud of me. And after a few months, they came to visit. I moved to a big house in the suburbs of Melbourne, next to the beach. Starting a new life abroad is more exhausting than you could think. But Mike and Brian made all plain sailing for me. I moved here 5 years ago. I had a job that I love, I have a big house on the beach, I have friends who are like my family, and my family visits me twice a year. Furthermore, I go on vacation with old friends. Not only that, but I’m in an amazing and vibrant city, and I have my little family with my husband Brian and my puppy Kira. Furthermore, I feel I’m right up my street, it is better than I ever dreamed, every morning I have to pinch myself, I can’t believe how it has changed my life.
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to travel with my
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around
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countries. When I was in my last year in university, during my internship. I
instantly
bonded with Mike, an Australian physiotherapist. His uncle Brian launched a private medical center and was looking for
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some
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people
to hire. I
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an opportunity to
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make
my dream
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come
true.

Mike and I went to Melbourne to visit Brian, and I did an informal interview. I had
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just
graduated, and he doubted if it would be a
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good
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idea
.
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, Brian
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told
me, that I could
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start
as an internship period for 6 months, and then we will talk. I came back home,
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but
I had a concrete plan, after visiting Melbourne, I
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feel
that I need to
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change
of scenery. I’ve been living in a
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small
village and had a
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lined up, for 6 months
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if I don’t stay working there, I will look for another
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, wherever,
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I fell in
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love
with Melbourne.

In September, I
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moved
to Melbourne, I was living in a cramped apartment
next
to Brian’s medical center. I
was excited
to
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start
fresh. Mike
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helps
me to immerse myself in my
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city, I met his
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, he
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me the lifestyle. I
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started
to work and was
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excited, everything was going well, I
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loved
my
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and I
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fine with my colleges.
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at night I
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used
to
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homesick, I
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keep
in contact daily with my
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and
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after a
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hard
day, I missed being with
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to cheer me up,
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only
she knows how to do it.

After finishing my internship, Brian offered me to be the chief of my department. I became a confident person for him. I
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used
to solve every issue and if I need to give an extra minute, I did. All my colleges
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accepted
my
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new
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. My parents were
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proud of me. And after a few months, they came to visit. I
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moved
to a
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in the suburbs of Melbourne,
next
to the beach.

Starting a
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new
life abroad is more exhausting than you could
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think
.
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But
Mike and Brian made all plain sailing for me. I
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moved
here 5 years ago. I had a
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that I
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, I have a
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on the beach, I have
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friends
who are like my
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, and my
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family
visits me twice a year.
Furthermore
, I go on vacation with
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old
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friends
. Not
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that,
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I’m in an amazing and vibrant city, and I have my
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with my husband Brian and my puppy Kira.
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, I
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I’m right up my street, it is better than I ever dreamed, every morning I
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have to
pinch myself, I can’t believe how it has
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changed
my life.
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IELTS essay Living in another country

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
483 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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