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Life today is easier ans more comfortable than it was when your grandparents were children. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answers. v.2

Life today is easier ans more comfortable than it was when your grandparents were children. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answers. v. 2
With the passage of the time, the world is taking long stride in the path of development and facilitating people to make their life more comfortable. In my opinion, nowadays people are living their life comfortably as compared to the time when our grandfathers were children. I fell this way for two reasons, which I will explore in the following essays. First of all, as compared to the past two to three centuries ago, technological development has flourished in many areas such as transportation. Now people are capable of travelling long distances in few hours but at the time when our grandfather were child, it used to take months to travel the same distance. For instance, my grandfather used to take one months to reach capital city of our district which is far from our village. He used horses and buggies for transportation of materials that are required for the daily life. Nevertheless, now we can travel the same distance in few hours with the help of buses, trains and airplanes. Furthermore, we can trade the materials at huge quantity with the help of these transportation means. This example illustrates how way of living has changed and with the advent of transportation, life has become easier. Secondly, different countries in the worlds are competing with each other by taking the standard of common people to the next level. People all over the world have been able to take advantage in different fields such as education. Education has completely changed the way of living and standard of the people. For example, in the past centuries, in our country India, it was difficult to find jobs because people were illiterate at that time. People used to do menial jobs and it was difficult for them to manage their family from the income of low grade jobs. Most of the high income jobs were taken by the foreigners. On the other hand, now literacy rate of our country has increased. People have been able to get education as much as they want. Education system of our country has been able to produce capable manpower which is the most important things for a country to develop. As a result, people get high income jobs and they have been able to maintain their life at high level. This shows that the life has become less arduous as compared to the past two- three centuries. In conclusion, I am of the opinion that the quality of life of people has upgraded as compared to the days of our grandfather when they were child. This is because transportation system has made it easier for commutation and to maintain the trade between two places. Furthermore, education system has helped people to make their life more comfortable as compared to the past.
With the passage of the
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time
, the world is taking long stride in the path of development and facilitating
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people
to
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make
their
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life
more comfortable. In my opinion, nowadays
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people
are living their
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life
comfortably
as compared to the
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time
when our
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grandfathers
were children. I fell this way for two reasons, which I will explore in the following essays.

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First of all
, as compared to the
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past
two to three centuries ago, technological development has flourished in
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many
areas such as
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transportation
.
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Now
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people
are capable of travelling long distances in few hours
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but
at the
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time
when our
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grandfather
were child, it
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used
to take months to travel the same distance.
For instance
, my
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grandfather
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used
to take
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one months
to reach capital city of our district which is far from our village. He
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used
horses and buggies for
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transportation
of materials that
are required
for the daily
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life
.
Nevertheless
,
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now
we can travel the same distance in few hours with the
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help
of buses, trains and airplanes.
Furthermore
, we can trade the materials at huge quantity with the
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help
of these
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transportation
means. This example illustrates how way of living has
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changed
and with the advent of
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transportation
,
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life
has become easier.

Secondly
,
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different
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countries
in the worlds are competing with each other by taking the standard of common
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people
to the
next
level.
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all over the world have been
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able
to take advantage in
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different
fields such as
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education
.
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Education
has completely
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changed
the way of living and standard of the
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people
.
For example
, in the
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past
centuries, in our
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country
India, it was difficult to find
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jobs
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because
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people
were illiterate at that
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time
.
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People
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used
to do menial
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jobs
and it was difficult for them to manage their family from the income of low grade
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jobs
. Most of the high income
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jobs
were taken
by the foreigners.
On the other hand
,
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now
literacy rate of our
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country
has increased.
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have been
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able
to
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get
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education
as much as they want.
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system of our
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country
has been
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able
to produce capable manpower which is the most
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important
things for a
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country
to develop.
As a result
,
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people
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get
high income
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jobs and
they have been
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able
to maintain their
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life
at high level. This
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shows
that the
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life
has become less arduous as compared to the
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past
two- three centuries.

In conclusion
, I am of the opinion that the quality of
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life
of
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people
has upgraded as compared to the days of our
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grandfather
when they were child. This is
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because
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transportation
system has made it easier for commutation and to maintain the trade between two places.
Furthermore
,
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education
system has
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helped
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people
to
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make
their
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life
more comfortable as compared to the
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past
.
12Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
56Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes
Change your language and you change your thoughts.
Karl Albrecht

IELTS essay Life today is easier ans more comfortable than it was when your grandparents were children. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answers. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
463 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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