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legal imprisonment should be decided keeping in view age , gender and family background of criminal Discuss

legal imprisonment should be decided keeping in view age, gender and family background of criminal Discuss DY6ej
Nowadays crime is growing at rapid rate but the criminal are not punished that fast for the crime commit. So due to that young generation are getting wrongly influence. There are many hurdles in law which is main cause of delay in legal judgement some of them are age, sex and social statuses which is going to be discussed in the essay further. To start with considering age the punishment should be decided according to the level of crime committed. Harsher the crime harsher the cause of it. If an under age is doing small crime like pickpocket they should be sent to child remand home and a below age does some big crime or repetitively doing the same criminal offence then the punishment has to be more effective. Gender plays main victim card roll so there should be equality and every one who proves to be guilty has to be punished. Some law are made to protect women but through wrong way some are misusing that power. One of the resent example is of Lucknow cab driver case where a girl breaked the law but she was a girl that why she excepted through it without penalty. One the other hand many people are using there position power and money power in wrong way to exploit the law and to except from the cause after doing some type of crime. Every one should be seen equal and who ever consider guilty has to be punished. Example many politician and film star are doing crime but due to there position and money power they are not treated as an criminal and if they are found criminal then also they are treated in special way. To conclude, every one are equal in eye of law and every one should be treated equally. No culprit should be left without penalty and those who had done less serious crime should be given a chance to rectify there mistakes.
Nowadays
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crime
is growing at rapid rate
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but
the
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criminal
are not punished that
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fast
for the
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crime
commit.
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So
due to that young generation are getting
wrongly
influence. There are
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many
hurdles in
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law
which is main cause of delay in legal judgement
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some
of them are
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age
, sex and social statuses which is going to
be discussed
in the essay
further
.

To
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start
with considering
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age
the punishment should
be decided
according to the level of
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crime
committed. Harsher the
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crime
harsher the cause of it. If an under
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age
is
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doing
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small
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crime
like pickpocket they should be
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sent
to child remand home and a below
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age
does
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some
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big
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crime
or
repetitively
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doing
the same
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criminal
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offence
then the punishment
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has to
be more effective. Gender plays main victim card roll
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so
there should be equality and every one who proves to be guilty
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has to
be punished
.
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Some
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law
are made
to protect women
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but
through
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wrong
way
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some
are misusing that
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power
. One of the resent example is of Lucknow cab driver case where a girl
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breaked
the
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law
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but
she was a girl that why she excepted through it without penalty.
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One
the other hand
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many
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people
are using there position
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power
and money
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power
in
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wrong
way to exploit the
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law
and to except from the cause after
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doing
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some
type of
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crime
. Every one should be
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seen
equal and who ever consider guilty
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has to
be punished
. Example
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many politician
and film star are
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doing
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crime
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but
due to there position and money
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power
they are not treated as
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an
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criminal
and if they
are found
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criminal
then
also
they
are treated
in special way.

To conclude
, every one are equal in eye of
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law
and every one should
be treated
equally
. No culprit should be
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left
without penalty and those who had done less serious
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crime
should be
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given
a chance to rectify
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there
mistakes.
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IELTS essay legal imprisonment should be decided keeping in view age, gender and family background of criminal Discuss

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  American English
3 paragraphs
325 words
5.5
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