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Leader and directors in an organization are normally older people. Some people think younger leader would be better. Do you agree or disagree? v.2

Leader and directors in an organization are normally older people. Some people think younger leader would be better. v. 2
It is irrefutable mostly team managers are elder employees. According to some, the younger individuals as a leader are more competent and can give better outputs. I disagree with the notion and believe that experience matters a lot in becoming a leader. Experience is the major factor in any organization to lead and mostly younger individuals are inadequate with experience, therefore companies prefer to choose aged people. Important decisions and holding nerves during crises situations can only learnt through experience which are vital for the organization to run the business smoothly all the time. A recent survey from Management college of India, revealed that only 10 per cent business survive with young leaders in Maharashtra state, for that reason experience makes a difference for any organization and they select older individuals over younger one. Another factor is the respect and employees listen to elder leaders as compared to new comer. It is obvious that elder heads are treated in a respected way and employees often follow their ideas and guidelines without questioning them. Older team leader is working for long time with other employees and they do not prove their capabilities, therefore people respect them and follow their paths without a query. Comparing new comers need to prove their talent and skills before commanding any time in the department and it takes time. In conclusion, usually in organizations employee listen to elders and behave in good manners with them and capacity to deliver crucial decisions during emergency to maintain the business reputation can only be learnt through experience and young leaders lack that potential, therefore I believe that elder employees are better leaders.
It is irrefutable
mostly
team managers are
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elder
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employees
. According to
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some
, the younger individuals as a
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leader
are more competent and can give better outputs. I disagree with the notion and believe that
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experience
matters a lot in becoming a leader.

Experience is the major factor in any
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organization
to lead and
mostly
younger individuals are inadequate with
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experience
,
therefore
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companies
prefer to choose aged
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people
.
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Important
decisions and holding nerves during crises situations can
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only
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learnt
through
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experience
which are vital for the
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organization
to run the business
smoothly
all the time. A recent survey from Management college of India, revealed that
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only
10 per cent business survive with young
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leaders
in Maharashtra state, for that reason
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experience
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makes
a difference for any
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organization and
they select older individuals over younger one.

Another factor is the respect and
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employees
listen to
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elder
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leaders
as compared to
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new comer
. It is obvious that
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elder
heads
are treated
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in a respected way
and
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employees
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often
follow their
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ideas
and guidelines without questioning them. Older team
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leader
is working for long time with other
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employees and
they do not prove their capabilities,
therefore
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people
respect them and follow their paths without a query. Comparing
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new comers
need to prove their talent and
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skills
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before
commanding any time in the department and it takes time.

In conclusion
,
usually
in
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organizations
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employee
listen to
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elders
and behave in
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good
manners with them and capacity to deliver crucial decisions during emergency to maintain the business reputation can
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only
be
Possible spelling mistake. 'learnt' is British English.
learnt
through
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experience
and young
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leaders
lack that potential,
therefore
I believe that
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elder
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employees
are better
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leaders
.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
26Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes
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IELTS essay Leader and directors in an organization are normally older people. Some people think younger leader would be better. v. 2

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  American English
4 paragraphs
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