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large proportion of people live and work in other countries today than at any time in the past. it is very proble that in the future there will be no borders and people will be freely between countries. To what extent do you agree with this opinion.

large proportion of people live and work in other countries today than at any time in the past. it is very proble that in the future there will be no borders and people will be freely between countries. G71g
Nowadays, there are so many people live and work in other countries, and it became common with us. I’m totally disagree that there will no more international borders in the future and we will able to work and live in as many countries as we want. On the one hand, open borders may help people have more opportunities to find a good place to live or find a well-paid job to do in some wealthy countries. Secondly, those countries may be overpopulated because of refugees and immigrants, who come to find jobs and a good environment to live in. And the crime rate might rise extremely high. At the same, we would lose our national identity if we reside in a different country and live with local people for a long time, about 10 or 20 years and we will able to forget our own language. In my opinion, it would cause some problems if we open the international borders like damage the nature, destroy animal’s habitats. The amount of immigrants increase also lead to the requirement of housing, apartments. That is why we have to cut down tree, exploit the forest to build houses and places to people, and the natural materials will be exhausted soon in the future. Vehicles is indispensable factor for people, and the emissions of cars and bikes can make dramatically problem to nature. In conclusion, open international borders may have some benefits for the world but for me, there are more disadvantages of opening borders than the advantages it will make to our life.
Nowadays, there are
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live
and work in other
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, and it became common with us. I’m
totally
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disagree
that there will no more international
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borders
in the
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future and
we
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will able
to work and
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live
in as
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many
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countries
as we want.

On the one hand, open
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borders
may
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help
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people
have more opportunities to find a
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good
place to
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live
or find a well-paid job to do in
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some
wealthy
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countries
.
Secondly
, those
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may
be overpopulated
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because
of refugees and immigrants, who
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come
to find jobs and a
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good
environment to
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live
in. And the crime rate might rise
extremely
high.

At the same, we would lose our national identity if we reside in a
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different
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country
and
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live
with local
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people
for a long time, about 10 or 20
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years and
we
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will able
to forget our
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own
language. In my opinion, it would cause
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some
problems if we open the international
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borders
like damage the nature,
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destroy
animal’s habitats. The amount of immigrants
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increase
also
lead to the requirement of housing, apartments.
That is
why we
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have to
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cut
down tree, exploit the forest to build
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houses
and places to
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people
, and the natural materials will
be exhausted
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soon
in the future. Vehicles
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is
indispensable factor for
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people
, and the emissions of cars and bikes can
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make
dramatically
problem to nature.

In conclusion
, open international
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borders
may have
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some
benefits for the world
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but
for me, there are more disadvantages of opening
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borders
than the advantages it will
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make
to our life.
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IELTS essay large proportion of people live and work in other countries today than at any time in the past. it is very proble that in the future there will be no borders and people will be freely between countries.

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