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Killing animals and using their flesh for food is not right. Do you agree or disagree?

Killing animals and using their flesh for food is not right. lWqED
With a belief that meat is tastier and healthier than plants, numbers of animals used are killed and their parts are used for human’s consumption. I do not agree with unnecessary killing of animals. Some people believe that meat is a vital part of food. However, they are highly misunderstood. Firstly, animals are living creatures and they have legal right to live just as human beings. The only difference is non-verbal creatures are not able to speak; therefore, it is cruel to kill them for human's greed and requirements. For example, dogs and cats are human's friends since ancient times. These species can love, cry, and care the same way as mankind. If we will continue to beat and butcher them then we may lose our animal carl-takers. Secondly, myriad of animals are used in various felids such as agriculture and riding. To illustrate, cows, and ox have been go to farm for generations, so, harming these working animals may lead to losing our helping hands. Hence, slaughter of animals innocent species, just for food is morally wrong and not respectable. In addition, human body can function well without meat and meat free diet. To illustrate, a research shows that vegans live a normal and healthier lifestyle compare to one's who eat meat. Many peas and dry fruits provide all required nutrients for healthy longer life. Furthermore, while eating other animals there are high risk of getting contaminated with numerous bacterial and viruses. Corona-virus transformation from bat is the predominant proof that the whole world has experienced recently. Thus, hunting animals and using them for diet is unhealthy and risky. To summarize, I oppose am firmly in oppose to poach animals and use their fleshes as food. Non-vegetarian people should start lowering meat intake first and later they should switch to the vegetables.
With a belief that
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meat
is tastier and healthier than plants, numbers of
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animals
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used
are killed
and their parts are
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used
for human’s consumption. I do not
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agree
with unnecessary killing of animals.

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Some
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people
believe that
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meat
is a vital part of food.
However
, they are
highly
misunderstood.
Firstly
,
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animals
are living
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creatures and
they have legal right to
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live
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just
as human beings. The
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only
difference is non-verbal creatures are not able to speak;
therefore
, it is cruel to kill them for human's greed and requirements.
For example
, dogs and cats are
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human's friends
since ancient times. These species can
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love
, cry, and care the same way as mankind. If we
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will continue
to beat and butcher them then we may lose our
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animal
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carl-takers
.
Secondly
, myriad of
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animals
are
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used
in various
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felids
such as agriculture and riding. To illustrate, cows, and ox have been
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go
to farm for generations,
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so
, harming these working
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animals
may lead to losing our helping hands.
Hence
, slaughter of
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animals
innocent species,
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just
for food is
morally
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wrong
and not respectable.

In addition
, human body can function well without
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meat
and
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meat
free diet. To illustrate,
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a research
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shows
that vegans
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live
a normal and healthier lifestyle compare to one's who eat
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meat
.
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Many
peas and dry fruits provide all required nutrients for healthy longer life.
Furthermore
, while eating other
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animals
there are high
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risk
of getting contaminated with numerous bacterial and viruses.
The term "Coronavirus" (= disease) is spelled as one word.
Corona-virus
transformation from bat is the predominant proof that the whole world has experienced recently.
Thus
, hunting
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animals
and using them for diet is unhealthy and risky.

To summarize
, I oppose am
firmly
in oppose to poach
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animals
and
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use
their fleshes as food. Non-vegetarian
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people
should
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start
lowering
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meat
intake
first
and later they should switch to the vegetables.

IELTS essay Killing animals and using their flesh for food is not right.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
303 words
6.0
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