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Joining a sports team can provide many benefits.

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Joining a sports team can provide many benefits. First of all, It's popularly known that sports are good for health. Sports team can reduce stress and pressure of life. Besides, it's develop life skills: teamwork and problem-solving skills. Its make me known how to be respected by everyone? When I'm joining a sports team I'm learned leadership skills, communication and resolve conflicts. Its make me professional and sucessful in the future.
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learned leadership
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IELTS essay Joining a sports team can provide many benefits.

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71 words
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