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It is argued that human life was better when technology was mediocre. This essay disagrees that life was simple before the advanced technology. Firstly, online transaction is possible due to the today's POSSIBLE SPELLING MISTAKE FOUND. advancementadvancement and Secondly, distant relations are closer now then before. Advanced technology made transfer of many stuff convenient, People can transfer money to others without going to the bank, merely by staying at home, such as paying school fees, utility bills. Furthermore, folks can buy clothes crockeries, Jeweleries and much more using their phone in one touch, without going to the markets before that everyone do the shopping by wasting petrol of vehicles, investing time and consideration and after doing window shopping then they finally find the commodities which they want that is why I disagree with that point of view since the technology made easier for them. For example: survey conducted by final year students that around 65% people pay challan early because of easiness of transferring. On the other hand, communication with distant relations was not that much possible than ever before. Relatives or friends that used to convey, but ow they can within minutes also could see each other. For Instance: my sister who lives in Germany talk with us for hours through Skype. To conclude, I firmly believe that recent development in technology made lives simple and easy for human species by passing conversation instantly and sending cash.
It
is argued
that human life was better when
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technology
was mediocre.

This essay disagrees that life was simple
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before
the advanced
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technology
.
Firstly
, online transaction is possible due to the
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today
's

POSSIBLE SPELLING MISTAKE FOUND.

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advancementadvancement
and
Secondly
, distant relations are closer
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now
Did you mean "than"?
then
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before
.

Advanced
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technology
made transfer of
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many stuff
convenient,
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People
can transfer money to others without going to the bank,
merely
by staying at home, such as paying school fees, utility bills.
Furthermore
, folks can
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buy
clothes
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crockeries
,
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Jeweleries
and much more using their phone in one touch, without going to the markets
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before
that everyone do the shopping by wasting petrol of vehicles, investing time and consideration and after doing window shopping then they
finally
find the commodities which they want
that is
why I disagree with that point of view since the
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technology
made easier for them.

For example
: survey conducted by final year students that around 65%
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people
pay
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challan
early
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because
of easiness of transferring.

On the other hand
, communication with distant relations was not that much possible than ever
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before
. Relatives or friends that
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used
to convey,
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but
ow they can within minutes
also
could
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see
each other.
For Instance
: my sister who
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lives
in Germany talk with us for hours through Skype.

To conclude
, I
firmly
believe that recent development in
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technology
made
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
lives
simple and easy for human species by passing conversation
instantly
and sending cash.
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8 paragraphs
238 words
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