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The relationships between the characters are strained and not loving. The only special relationship is that between Walt and his neighbors by reason of it will have a development in the film. Walt doesn’t have a good connection to his family, because they do not understand him and aren’t compassionate. In the first part of the scene the protagonist, walt is just coming from his wife’s funeral. The camera films walt from behind as he leaves his house and walks on his lawn. He stops on his lawn and looks at his neighbor. The camera pans slowly forward and approaches Walt’s face. He spits on his lawn and says “swamp rats”. This short scene from minutes 6 to 6: 20 clearly shows that walt has racist traits in his behavior and is derogatory towards his neighbors. In the second part of the scene from minutes 6: 21 to 7: 25 walt caught his granddaughter smoking in his garage but it doesn’t seem to shock him. She is enthusiastic about his oldtimer and asks him what happens to the car after his death. She probably wants the car and also speaks directly about the couch in his living room. At first the camera films the speaker from a normal distance. The camera approached walt’s face when the granddaughter’s inappropriate questions were asked. Walt spits too on the floor in this part of the scene. Spitting on the floor is his way of showing people that he finds them disparaging. In the seconds 7: 26 to 7: 40 the neighbor boy Thao rings Walt's doorbell and walt opens the door and asks him directly very unfriendly "what do you want? ", but thao kindly asks for a jump start cable. The camera always films the speaker from the front and the role partner from behind. Walt denies thao's question and slams the door in front of his nose. By the way all parts of the scene are without music, because the focus is only on the characters and the acting. The different parts of the scene show that Walt does not have good relations with his environment. The bad relationship between his family is understandable because they don't care about him in a loving way. The scene with the granddaughter shows this quite well. But a contrast is the relationship between Walt and Thao and his family. Because although Walt is initially very averse and unfriendly, this connection between them will take a complete turn in the film.
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relationships
between the characters
are strained
and not loving. The
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only
special
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relationship
is that between Walt and his
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neighbors
by reason of it will have a development in the film. Walt doesn’t have a
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good
connection to his family,
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because
they do not understand him and aren’t compassionate.

In the
first
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part
of the
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scene
the protagonist,
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walt
is
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just
coming from his wife’s funeral. The
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camera
films
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walt
from behind as he
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leaves
his
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house
and walks on his lawn. He
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stops
on his lawn and looks at his
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neighbor
. The
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camera
pans
slowly
forward and approaches Walt’s face. He spits on his lawn and says “swamp rats”. This short
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scene
from minutes 6 to 6: 20
clearly
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shows
that
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walt
has racist traits in his behavior and is derogatory towards his
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neighbors
. In the second
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part
of the
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scene
from minutes 6: 21 to 7: 25
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walt
caught his granddaughter smoking in his garage
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but
it doesn’t seem to shock him. She is enthusiastic about his
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oldtimer
and asks him what happens to the car after his death. She
probably
wants the car and
also
speaks
directly
about the couch in his living room. At
first
the
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camera
films the speaker from a normal distance. The
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camera
approached
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walt
’s face when the granddaughter’s inappropriate questions
were asked
. Walt spits too on the floor in this
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part
of the
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scene
. Spitting on the floor is his way of showing
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people
that he finds them disparaging. In the seconds 7: 26 to 7: 40 the
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neighbor
boy
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Thao
rings Walt's doorbell and
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walt
opens the door and asks him
directly
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very
unfriendly
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what do you want?
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"
,
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but
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thao
kindly
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asks for
a jump
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start
cable. The
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camera
always films the speaker from the front and the role partner from behind. Walt denies
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thao
's question and slams the door in front of his nose. By the way all
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parts
of the
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scene
are without music,
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because
the focus is
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only
on the characters and the acting.

The
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different
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parts
of the
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scene
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show
that Walt does not have
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good
relations with his environment. The
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bad
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relationship
between his family is understandable
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because
they don't care about him
Consider replacing "in a loving way" with the adverb for "loving"; e.g., "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
in a loving way
.
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The
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scene
with the granddaughter
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shows
this quite well.
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But
a contrast is the
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relationship
between Walt and
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Thao
and his family.
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Because
although Walt is
initially
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very
averse and
unfriendly
, this
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connection between
them will take a complete turn in the film.
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IELTS essay janina hat zu wenig schlaf

Essay
  American English
3 paragraphs
416 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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