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Its often said that the subjects taught in school are too academic. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays, people are trying their best to improve education for children to make a perfect atmosphere to study. It is believed that the subjects taught in schools are too academic and others think it would be more helpful for children to get practical skills instead of them. On the one hand, some people believe that academic teaching and practical skills both have a significant role in education. Children study how to analyze academic information and then use it during practice work. As I think, this way is an important one, children should have the opportunity to realize what they study and how to make use of it. For example, people who want to be a doctor, they must gain a lot of academic information before practice work, there is no way that some part of their studies is useless. All school subjects are like a foundation for further knowledge, children shouldn`t miss them to create their flawless study way. Though, I would add teaching some basics to the school system, like home management and communication. It`s a vital part of studying to become a mature person for young people. However, there are some disadvantages of this system of education. First of all, people understand information differently, it depends on the type of person. Personally, I realize studies quickly on practice work, but it doesn’t mean that others will do the same. Secondly, this education includes a lot of different subjects and information, which are also needed before practice trainings to structure your mind for all spheres of life. In conclusion, from my point of view, academic teaching and practical experience are both necessary in the right proportion.
Nowadays,
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improve
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education
for
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children
to
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make
a perfect atmosphere to
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study
. It
is believed
that the subjects taught in schools are too
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academic
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and others
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think
it would be more helpful for
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children
to
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get
practical
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skills
instead
of them.

On the one hand,
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some
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people
believe that
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academic
teaching and practical
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skills
both have a significant role in
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education
.
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Children
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study
how to analyze
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academic
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information
and then
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use
it during
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practice
work. As I
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think
, this way is an
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important
one,
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children
should have the opportunity to realize what they
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study
and how to
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make
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use
of it.
For example
,
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people
who want to be a doctor, they
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must
gain
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a lot of
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academic
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information
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before
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practice
work, there is no way that
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some
part of their
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studies
is useless. All school subjects are like a foundation for
further
knowledge,
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children
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shouldn`t
miss them to create their flawless
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study
way. Though, I would
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add
teaching
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some
basics to the school system, like home management and communication.
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a vital part of studying to become a mature person for young
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people
.

However
, there are
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some
disadvantages of this system of
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education
.
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First of all
,
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people
understand
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information
differently
, it depends on the type of person.
Personally
, I realize
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studies
quickly
on
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practice
work,
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it doesn’t mean that others will do the same.
Secondly
, this
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education
includes
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a lot of
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different
subjects and
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information
, which are
also
needed
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before
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practice
trainings to structure your mind for all spheres of life.

In conclusion
, from my point of view,
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academic
teaching and practical experience are both necessary in the right proportion.
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IELTS essay Its often said that the subjects taught in school are too academic.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
277 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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