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It is widely discussed that all well-known television shows should attempt to raise public awareness about social concerns. In my opinion, such initiatives by well-known entertainment shows are necessary. The main reason for my viewpoint is that the general public extensively watches all popular entertainment programmes. Therefore, by communicating a social message, they may educate people about it. In the forthcoming paragraphs, I shall explain my point of view.

It is widely discussed that all well-known television shows should attempt to raise public awareness about social concerns. In my opinion, such initiatives by well-known entertainment shows are necessary. The main reason for my viewpoint is that the general public extensively watches all popular entertainment programmes. Therefore, by communicating a social message, they may educate people about it. In the forthcoming paragraphs, I shall explain my point of view. 3b2gm
It is widely discussed that all well-known television shows should attempt to raise public awareness about social concerns. In my opinion, such initiatives by well-known entertainment shows are necessary. The main reason for my viewpoint is that the general public extensively watches all popular entertainment programmes. Therefore, by communicating a social message, they may educate people about it. In the forthcoming paragraphs, I shall explain my point of view. These days, entertainment shows are popular among all ages and genders. Suppose TV shows focus on teaching people about social concerns in their communities. Then it's without a doubt that it will reach the masses and subliminally inform and help people become more conscious of the country's problems. Moreover, these messages raise awareness of social concerns such as rising crime, environmental difficulties, and many others that occur on a daily basis and pose possible hazards and threats to people's lives. Hence it allows people to defend themselves and enhance their quality of life. Another aspect to consider is that there aren't enough mediums for individuals to learn about the concerns. Because the publications that usually cover these topics, such as newspapers and magazines, are not regularly read by the general public, especially young people. The best method to reach out to them and pass on information, whether directly or indirectly, is through entertainment programmes. Even if a portion of the show's time is devoted to educational programming, this would have a ripple effect on society at large. In a way, it might also be true that such inclusion would jeopardize the essence of the programs. However, program directors' creativity can assist in delivering the social message while still protecting the program's core in a unique way.
It is
widely
discussed that all well-known television
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shows
should attempt to raise public

awareness about
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social
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concerns
. In my opinion, such initiatives by well-known entertainment
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shows
are necessary. The main reason for my viewpoint is that the
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general public
extensively
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watches
all popular entertainment
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programmes
.
Therefore
, by communicating a
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social
message, they may educate
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people
about it. In the forthcoming paragraphs, I shall
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explain
my point of view.

These days, entertainment
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shows
are popular among all ages and genders. Suppose TV
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shows
focus on teaching
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people
about
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social
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concerns
in their communities. Then it's without a doubt that it will reach the masses and
subliminally
inform and
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help
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people
become more conscious of the country's problems.
Moreover
, these messages raise awareness of
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social
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
concerns
such as rising crime, environmental difficulties, and
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many
others that occur on a daily basis and pose possible hazards and threats to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
's
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lives
.
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Hence
it
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allows
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people
to defend themselves and enhance their quality of life.

Another aspect to consider is that there aren't
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enough
mediums for individuals to learn about the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
concerns
.
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
Because
the publications that
usually
cover these topics, such as newspapers and magazines, are not
regularly
read by the
Consider using "public".
general public
,
especially
young
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people
. The best method to reach out to them and pass on information, whether
directly
or
indirectly
, is through entertainment
Possible spelling mistake. 'programmes' is British English.
programmes
. Even if a portion of the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
show
's time
is devoted
to educational programming, this would have a ripple effect on society at large.

In a way, it might
also
be true that such inclusion would jeopardize the essence of the

programs.
However
, program directors' creativity can assist in delivering the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
social
message while
still
protecting the program's core
Consider replacing "in a unique way" with the adverb for "unique"; e.g., "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
in a unique way
.
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IELTS essay It is widely discussed that all well-known television shows should attempt to raise public awareness about social concerns. In my opinion, such initiatives by well-known entertainment shows are necessary. The main reason for my viewpoint is that the general public extensively watches all popular entertainment programmes. Therefore, by communicating a social message, they may educate people about it. In the forthcoming paragraphs, I shall explain my point of view.

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