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It is undeniable that individuals migrate to metropolitan cities and several issues carry along with them. According to my perception, authority should encourage masses to dwell in regional towns. Both questions are answered in the ensuing paragraphs.

It is undeniable that individuals migrate to metropolitan cities and several issues carry along with them. According to my perception, authority should encourage masses to dwell in regional towns. Both questions are answered in the ensuing paragraphs. w1dd
It is undeniable that individuals migrate to metropolitan cities and several issues carry along with them. According to my perception, authority should encourage masses to dwell in regional towns. Both questions are answered in the ensuing paragraphs. Examining the first answer, some problems are taken by migrators. The most critical is living expenses in metro city is higher than countryside. To be more exact, the rate of houses, apartments in costly as well as such fundamental necessities including food, clothes and medical are expensive. However, their basic wages are high and they survive precisely. Another problem is traffic congestion. Dwellers of other city make traffic congestion because they use private transit instead of public transport; and air pollution also have to rise in mega cities. Consequently, residents of major cities do not have pure air for breathing. So, these obstacles are along with individuals. On the other hand, government should take praiseworthy steps to encourage masses to reside in the regional towns. Firstly, authority should provide key elements to people for living precisely. Like water, food, medical and etcetera. Sachin, for instance, is a small town. But all kind of amenities are provided to attract people towards small and developed towns. They should make employment by making some multinational industries and so on. To cap it all, they must be established some hospitals and schools for both, good education as well as good healthcare. To conclude that all kinds of amenities should be given to attract individuals as well as change the mindset of people towards mega cities.
It is undeniable that individuals migrate to metropolitan
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cities
and several issues carry along with them. According to my perception, authority should encourage masses to dwell in regional
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towns
. Both questions
are answered
in the ensuing paragraphs.

Examining the
first
answer,
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some
problems
are taken
by migrators. The most critical is living expenses in metro city is higher than countryside. To be more exact, the rate of
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houses
, apartments in costly
as well
as such fundamental necessities including food, clothes and medical are expensive.
However
, their basic wages are
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high and
they survive
precisely
. Another problem is traffic congestion. Dwellers of other city
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make
traffic congestion
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because
they
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use
private transit
instead
of public transport; and air pollution
also
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have to
rise in mega
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cities
.
Consequently
, residents of major
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cities
do not have pure air for breathing.
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So
, these obstacles are along with individuals.

On the other hand
,
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government
should take praiseworthy steps to encourage masses to reside in the regional
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towns
.
Firstly
, authority should provide key elements to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
for living
precisely
. Like water, food, medical and etcetera.
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Sachin
,
for instance
, is a
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small
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town
.
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But
all kind of amenities
are provided
to attract
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people
towards
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small
and developed
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towns
. They should
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make
employment by making
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some
multinational industries and
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so
on. To cap it all, they
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must
be established
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some
hospitals and schools for both,
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good
education
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as well as
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good
healthcare.

To conclude
that all kinds of amenities should be
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given
to attract individuals
as well
as
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change
the mindset of
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people
towards mega
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cities
.
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IELTS essay It is undeniable that individuals migrate to metropolitan cities and several issues carry along with them. According to my perception, authority should encourage masses to dwell in regional towns. Both questions are answered in the ensuing paragraphs.

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258 words
6.0
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