Search
Vocabularying
Listening
Reading
1. Academic
2. General
Writing
1. IELTSWriting Checker
2. IELTS Writing Samples
Speaking

Do you want to improve your writing? Try our new evaluation service and get detailed feedback.

It is true that nowadays tourism industry is at the peak of all business sectors.

It is true that nowadays tourism industry is at the peak of all business sectors. g5ePD

It is true that nowadays tourism industry is at the peak of all business sectors. Many individuals are showing affection toward the travelling. Thus, it is claimed that abroad tour could be a source of great experiences for youth, whereas other argues that foreign tour consist too much of expenses. I shall discuss both the views in the upcoming paragraphs with my personal opinion in the conclusion. In fact, tour of abroad have many advantages to youth generation. First of all, it might be a source to accumulate knowledge about foreign cultures and traditions to individual. For instance, I recently visited Japan and I came to know about various traditions and lifestyle of Japanese people. Second of all, if a person has a great taste of observing some rare sceneries, so travelling abroad nation could fulfill it. For instance, there are least countries on the globe where one can experience snow. Thus, by travelling cold countries one can experience the enjoyment of snowfall. However, if people wants to travel abroad, they have to spend ample of money. It could not be an easy task for underprivileged individuals. Because the cost of food and qccommodation could be much higher compared to than that of having a domestic tour. For example, in 2010, when my father visited Canada it costed them around more than 3 lacs of Indian Rupee in just four days. Furthermore, nowadays flight tickets are much higher than that of past. Hence, a person has to spend too much of expenses in foreign tour. To conclude, indeed travelling abroad nations could be a considerable source to get various experiences, but I personally think that the expenses of a foreign tour are not suitable for poor people and they should not travel abroad to gain experiences.

It is true that nowadays tourism industry is at the peak of all business sectors. This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:a plethora ofa number ofnumerous
Many
 individuals are showing affection toward the You use this word too often, consider replacing it withflytreksailproceedmigratemove
travelling
. Thus
, it is claimed
 that You use this word too often, consider replacing it withoverseaselsewhereaway
abroad
You use this word too often, consider replacing it withtrekoutingexpeditiontravelswingtrip
tour
 could be a source of great You use this word too often, consider replacing it withtrainingmaturitypracticeunderstandingwisdompatience
experiences
 for youth, whereas other argues that You use this word too often, consider replacing it withdifferentunfamiliaralienexternaloverseasoffshore
foreign
You use this word too often, consider replacing it withtrekoutingexpeditiontravelswingtrip
tour
 consist too You use this word too often, consider replacing it withenough
much
 of expenses. I shall discuss both the views in the upcoming paragraphs with my personal opinion in the conclusion.

In fact, You use this word too often, consider replacing it withtrekoutingexpeditiontravelswingtrip
tour
 of You use this word too often, consider replacing it withoverseaselsewhereaway
abroad
 have This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:a plethora ofa number ofnumerous
many
 advantages to youth generation. This phrase is redundant. Consider using "first".First
First of all
, it might be a source to accumulate knowledge about You use this word too often, consider replacing it withdifferentunfamiliaralienexternaloverseasoffshore
foreign
 cultures and traditions to individual. For instance
, I recently visited Japan and I came to know about various traditions and lifestyle of Japanese This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :individualsnationsociety
people
. Second of all, if a person has a great taste of observing This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:a number of
some
 rare sceneries, This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:consequently
so
You use this word too often, consider replacing it withflytreksailproceedmigratemove
travelling
You use this word too often, consider replacing it withoverseaselsewhereaway
abroad
 nation could fulfill it. For instance
, there are A determiner is probably missing here: "the least".the least
least
 countries on the globe where one can You use this word too often, consider replacing it withtrainingmaturitypracticeunderstandingwisdompatience
experience
 snow. Thus
, by You use this word too often, consider replacing it withflytreksailproceedmigratemove
travelling
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :chillyfrosty
cold
 countries one can You use this word too often, consider replacing it withtrainingmaturitypracticeunderstandingwisdompatience
experience
 the enjoyment of snowfall.

However
, if This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :individualsnationsociety
people
If 'people' is plural here, don't use the third-person singular verb.want
wants
 to travel You use this word too often, consider replacing it withoverseaselsewhereaway
abroad
, they This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:ought to
have to
 spend ample of money. It could not be an easy task for underprivileged individuals. This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:due to the factin light of the fact thatowing to the fact that
Because
 the cost of food and Possible spelling mistake found.accommodation
qccommodation
 could be You use this word too often, consider replacing it withenough
much
 higher compared to than that of having a domestic You use this word too often, consider replacing it withtrekoutingexpeditiontravelswingtrip
tour
. For example
, in 2010, when my father visited Canada it costed them around more than 3 Possible spelling mistake found.lacklawslackslapslabslays
lacs
 of Indian Rupee in This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:merely
just
 four days. Furthermore
, nowadays flight tickets are You use this word too often, consider replacing it withenough
much
 higher than that of past. Hence
, a person This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:oughts to
has to
 spend too You use this word too often, consider replacing it withenough
much
 of expenses in You use this word too often, consider replacing it withdifferentunfamiliaralienexternaloverseasoffshore
foreign
 tour.

To conclude
, indeed
You use this word too often, consider replacing it withflytreksailproceedmigratemove
travelling
You use this word too often, consider replacing it withoverseaselsewhereaway
abroad
 nations could be a considerable source to This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :acquire
get
 various You use this word too often, consider replacing it withtrainingmaturitypracticeunderstandingwisdompatience
experiences
, This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:on the contrary
but
 I personally
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :reckonassumebelieveconsider
think
 that the expenses of a You use this word too often, consider replacing it withdifferentunfamiliaralienexternaloverseasoffshore
foreign
You use this word too often, consider replacing it withtrekoutingexpeditiontravelswingtrip
tour
 are not suitable for poor Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).people, and
people and
 they should not travel You use this word too often, consider replacing it withoverseaselsewhereaway
abroad
 to gain You use this word too often, consider replacing it withtrainingmaturitypracticeunderstandingwisdompatience
experiences
. 