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It is too expensive to look after and repair old buildings. This money should be spent on building modern buildings instead. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

It is too expensive to look after and repair old buildings. This money should be spent on building modern buildings instead. NDjd
In this day and age people are investing more in modern buildings due to everyday development. Some people believe that it is quite exorbitant to take care and renovate ancient buildings rather those funds should be used to construct advanced buildings, however I completely agree with judgment. First and foremost, ancient buildings in most countries are mainly historical and it is of significant importance that they are looked after and renovated. When it comes to repairing old buildings it is quite costly and ancient material which were used to construct them will no longer be in the market. For instance, the Great Wall of China which is a famous destination for thousands of tourists over the past years must be well preserved annually because it has been in existence for over eight decades. Therefore the Chinese government would spend millions on the maintenance of the Great Wall trying to get the exact material used in the building of the wall. On the other hand, constructing modern houses requires up to date building materials which are readily available these days and owners or government do look at the most cost-effective option. They explore cheaper options that include a compromise on material and construction quality. For example, the famous amusement park in The Gambia which was built in the year 2000 was demolished because recurrent renovations took over almost monthly due to the fact that most of the material were outdated. However, a new one with advanced technology was built and that saved the government from a lot of expenses. In conclusion, I completely agree with people who believe that funds should be used to construct new buildings because it is expensive to maintain and preserve old buildings.
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are investing more in modern
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due to everyday development.
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people
believe that it is quite exorbitant to take care and renovate ancient
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buildings
rather
those funds should be
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used
to construct advanced
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I completely
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with judgment.

First
and foremost, ancient
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buildings
in most countries are
mainly
historical and it is of significant importance that they
are looked
after and renovated. When it
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comes
to repairing
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old
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buildings
it is quite costly and ancient
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material
which were
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used
to construct them will no longer be in the market.
For instance
, the Great Wall of China which is a
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famous
destination for thousands of tourists over the past years
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must
be
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well preserved
annually
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because
it has been in existence for over eight decades.
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Therefore
the Chinese
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government
would spend millions on the maintenance of the Great Wall trying to
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get
the exact
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material
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used
in the
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building
of the wall.

On the other hand
, constructing modern
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houses
requires up to date
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building
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materials
which are
readily
available these days and owners or
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government
do look at the most cost-effective option. They explore cheaper options that include a compromise on
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material
and construction quality.
For example
, the
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famous
amusement park in The Gambia which
was built
in the year 2000
was demolished
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because
recurrent renovations took over almost monthly due to the fact that most of the
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material
were outdated
.
However
, a new one with advanced technology
was built
and that saved the
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government
from
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a lot of
expenses.

In conclusion
, I completely
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agree
with
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people
who believe that funds should be
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used
to construct new
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buildings
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because
it is expensive to maintain and preserve
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old
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IELTS essay It is too expensive to look after and repair old buildings. This money should be spent on building modern buildings instead.

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