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It is too expensive to look after and repair old

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A number of people think that looking after old buildings and monuments repairing are highly cost effective rather than that the money should be spent on the new infrastructure and modern upgraded building. But, In my opinion I disagree to this statement as history plays a major with an ancient infrastructure and palaces. Firstly, the architecture and historical monuments are highly demandable for their splendid work in the past decades. Which was build in the ancient period even though it may take high expenses to repair, it elaborates the history of each one home country and human civilization. For instance, In Jaipur the wall of Amer fort are fixed with the Glass work from the roof to the floor so that it should be continuing for the future generations to know about the historical places. Secondly, the major reason for the fixing and polishing the historical era are the tourism which plays a huge role. They sight the various historical places and capture the ancient histories. Consequently, they help in the increase income and rise in the business growth. For example, the polishing of mysore palace raised lakh of amount but now in the recent years it is the top tourist destination by both national and foreign visitors, which increases the funds to the government. In conclusion, it States that the repairing of old monuments and historical era are important for the future generations to know about ancient history. The tourist also help the business and economy growth by visiting the historical places.
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people
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that looking after
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old
buildings and monuments repairing are
highly
cost effective
rather
than that the money should
be spent
on the new infrastructure and modern upgraded building.
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But
, In my opinion I disagree to this statement as
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history
plays a major with an
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ancient
infrastructure and palaces.

Firstly
, the architecture and
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historical
monuments are
highly
demandable for their splendid work in the past decades. Which was build in the
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ancient
period
even though
it may take high expenses to repair, it elaborates the
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history
of each one home country and human civilization.
For instance
, In Jaipur the wall of Amer fort are
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fixed
with the Glass work from the roof to the floor
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so
that it should be continuing for the future generations to know about the
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historical
places.

Secondly
, the major reason for the fixing and polishing the
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historical
era are the tourism which plays a huge role. They sight the various
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historical
places and capture the
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ancient
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histories
.
Consequently
, they
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help
in the increase income and rise in the business growth.
For example
, the polishing of
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mysore
palace raised lakh of amount
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but
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now
in the recent years it is the top tourist destination by both national and foreign visitors, which increases the funds to the
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government
.

In conclusion
, it States that the repairing of
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old
monuments and
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historical
era are
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important
for the future generations to know about
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ancient
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history
. The tourist
also
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help
the business and economy growth by visiting the
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historical
places.
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IELTS essay It is too expensive to look after and repair old

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
253 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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