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It is sometimes said that a high salary is the most important factor in choosing a job. Do you agree?

It is sometimes said that a high salary is the most important factor in choosing a job. Do you agree? 1qa7
It is observed that a better amount of wages is considered as main element when applying for a job. If questioned, I differ with the statement because of some arguments. My inclination is justified in the ensuing write-ups. There are several arguments which support my point of view. The first and foremost one is that there are some other factors which should not be overlooked while selecting a work. In other words, apart from high salary; work environment as well as future opportunities are also vital criteria for choosing a job. Furthermore, high salary jobs do not make person happy always. To illustrate, sometimes people select those jobs which provide them large amount of money; but not fulfill their passion. If this scenario occurs, people become depress and sad. For example, there is a survey which was conducted by United Nations; it states that 53% of total employees were not satisfied by their jobs in between 2010 and 2017. Because they choose their works by thinking about salary but not regarding passion. On the contrary, some people believe that higher salary should be the most important factor while deciding a job. The reason is that money can bring luxurious life. By this I mean that people who earn more money; they can buy anything without any restriction. For instance, employees who work at higher position in multi-national company can afford to live in big houses whereas labours can not. In conclusion, I do not support that a high salary should be vital aspect while deciding to do any job. Because other factors such as job-satisfaction and work environment as well as scope in future are also important. However, higher wages can provide luxurious lifestyle.
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is observed
that a better amount of wages
is considered
as main element when applying for a
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job
. If questioned, I differ with the statement
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because
of
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some
arguments. My inclination
is justified
in the ensuing write-ups.

There are several arguments which support my point of view. The
first
and foremost one is that there are
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some
other factors which should not
be overlooked
while selecting a
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work
.
In other words
, apart from high
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salary
;
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work
environment
as well
as future opportunities are
also
vital criteria for choosing a job.

Furthermore
, high
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salary
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jobs
do not
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make
person happy
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always
. To illustrate,
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sometimes
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people
select those
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jobs
which provide them large amount of money;
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but
not fulfill their passion. If this scenario occurs,
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people
become depress and sad.
For example
, there is a survey which
was conducted
by United Nations; it states that 53% of total employees were not satisfied by their
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jobs
in between 2010 and 2017.
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Because
they choose their works by thinking about
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salary
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but
not regarding passion.

On the contrary
,
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some
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people
believe that higher
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salary
should be the most
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important
factor while deciding a
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job
. The reason is that money can bring luxurious life. By this I mean that
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people
who earn more money; they can
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buy
anything without any restriction.
For instance
, employees who
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work
at higher position in multi-national
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company
can afford to
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live
in
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big
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houses
whereas
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labours
can not.

In conclusion
, I do not support that a high
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salary
should be vital aspect while deciding to do any
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job
.
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Because
other factors such as job-satisfaction and
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work
environment
as well
as scope in future are
also
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important
.
However
, higher wages can provide luxurious lifestyle.
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IELTS essay It is sometimes said that a high salary is the most important factor in choosing a job. Do you agree?

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
284 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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