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It is often said that people over the age of 60 should not work anymore because of the problem they create that employer's should make them retire. do you agree or disagree given reason for your opinion.

It is often said that people over the age of 60 should not work anymore because of the problem they create that employer's should make them retire. given reason for your opinion. m9KKd
In this present time, everyone require more work for full fill thier basic needs. apropos to the statement, older people who over the age of 60 should not physically work due to the fact that they create many problems for a new employees. I partially accord with the provided statement. I will contemplated the reasons for both view's in my forthcoming paragraphs. On the one hand, there are myriad of reasons behind that old individuals should make them retire. First and foremost, they do not physical fit and fine owing to the fact that people over the age of 60. Moreover, they do less productivity indulge on the work place rather than new youth. Later, they do not able to work late at night for long hours. Secondly, they do not mentally fit due to the poor knowledge about advancement technology. In addition, in the case of this, ealier employees do bad effect on the company just beacuse lack of experience about productivity things. On the other hand, there are ample of reasons that senior citizens should work anymore. In the modern era, dwellers like to live in nuclear family and live with their paternal or maternal parents hence they need to full fii their daily basic requirements to work on the business for survival of their life. Further more they have a lot of experience about the work then they can guide with innovative ideas to the new generation. For instance, Dr APJ abdul kalamhas a lot of experience which he gets from different fields durind his humble life. He was working under the organisation company. Although hewas over the age on the contrary, he was one of the person who gave the advice the advice many people for achieve their goals. To conclude, there is no skepticism, old people had a lot of experience about the work as well as they know how to tackle with complex problems with come out creative thought.
In this present time, everyone
The pronoun 'everyone' is usually used with a third-person or a past tense verb: "requires", "required".
require
more
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work
for full fill
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thier
basic needs.
This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
apropos
to the statement, older
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people
who over the age of 60 should not
physically
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work
due to the fact that they create
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
problems for a new
Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean "employee"?
employees
. I
partially
accord with the provided statement. I will
The verb 'will' requires the base form of the verb: "contemplate"
contemplated
the reasons for both
Incorrect plural form; it does not need any apostrophe. Did you mean "views"?
view's
in my forthcoming paragraphs.

On the one hand, there are myriad of reasons behind that
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
old
individuals should
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
them retire.
First
and foremost, they do not physical fit and fine owing to the fact that
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
over the age of 60.
Moreover
, they do less productivity indulge on the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
work
place
rather
than new youth. Later, they do not able to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
work
late at night for long hours.
Secondly
, they do not mentally fit due to the poor knowledge about advancement technology.
In addition
, in the case of this,
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ealier
employees do
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
bad
effect on the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
company
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just
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beacuse
lack of
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experience
about productivity things.

On the other hand
, there are ample of reasons that senior citizens should work anymore. In the modern era, dwellers like to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
live
in nuclear family and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
live
with their paternal or maternal parents
hence
they need to full
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fii
their daily basic requirements to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
work
on the business for survival of their life.
Further
more they have
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
a lot of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
experience
about the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
work
then they can guide with innovative
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
ideas
to the new generation.
For instance
, Dr APJ
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abdul
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kalamhas
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
a lot of
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experience
which he
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
gets
from
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different
fields
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durind
his humble life. He was working under the
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organisation
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
company
. Although
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hewas
over the age
on the contrary
, he was one of the person who gave
This phrase is duplicated. You should probably leave only "the advice".
the advice the advice
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many
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people
for achieve their goals.
To conclude
, there is no skepticism,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
old
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people
had
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
a lot of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
experience
about the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
work
as well
as they know how to tackle with complex problems with
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
come
out creative
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
thought
.
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IELTS essay It is often said that people over the age of 60 should not work anymore because of the problem they create that employer's should make them retire. given reason for your opinion.

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