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It is important that we maintain and protect the beautiful building of the past, even if it is expensive for countries to do so. v.6

It is important that we maintain and protect the beautiful building of the past, even if it is expensive for countries to do so. v. 6
Buildings are being constructed to cater to housing needs, offices, shopping complex, etc. Every now and then a new building is being constructed using better technology and compliments modern cities. In this essay, I will discuss whether old buildings should be protected even if it is costly for the landlords to maintain them. There is a growing competition among various nations to build the best in class buildings with all the modern amenities. They are building skyscrapers to showcase their strength and economic superiority. For instance, Dubai is building a new tower which will be the tallest in the world and will have modern offices, shopping centres and luxurious hotels to mention a few. However, in doing so, the government shouldn't ignore the importance of buildings of the past. Old buildings are the symbol of our history and are of great archaeological importance to the nation. They should be protected in order to retain the historic roots on which the nation is built. For example, there are various monuments which are covered by Indian archaeological department as important buildings and are protected. An adequate government support should be in place to help in the maintenance of these buildings. It is undeniable that modern building in today's world is a necessity for any nation to grow but the old buildings should also be given the due importance they deserve. In my opinion, it is essential that beautiful old buildings are preserved, however, there should be some support from the government in ensuring their safety and maintenance.
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Buildings
are
being constructed
to cater to housing needs, offices, shopping complex, etc. Every
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now
and then a new
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building
is
being constructed
using better technology and compliments
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modern
cities. In this essay, I will discuss whether
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old
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buildings
should
be protected
even if it is costly for the landlords to maintain them.

There is a growing competition among various
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nations
to build the best in
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class
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buildings
with all the
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modern
amenities. They are
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building
skyscrapers to showcase their strength and economic superiority.
For instance
, Dubai is
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building
a new tower which will be the tallest in the world and will have
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modern
offices, shopping
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centres
and luxurious hotels to mention a few.
However
, in doing
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so
, the
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government
shouldn't
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ignore
the importance of
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buildings
of the past.

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Old
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buildings
are the symbol of our history and are of great archaeological importance to the
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nation
. They should
be protected
in order to retain the historic roots on which the
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nation
is built
.
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, there are various monuments which
are covered
by Indian archaeological department as
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important
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buildings
and
are protected
. An adequate
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government
support should be in place to
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help
in the maintenance of these buildings.

It is undeniable that
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modern
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building
in
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today
's world is a necessity for any
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nation
to grow
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the
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old
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buildings
should
also
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given
the due importance they deserve. In my opinion, it is essential that
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beautiful
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old
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buildings
are preserved
,
however
, there should be
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some
support from the
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government
in ensuring their safety and maintenance.
5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
20Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay It is important that we maintain and protect the beautiful building of the past, even if it is expensive for countries to do so. v. 6

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
255 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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