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it is illegal for people to smoke in all public places and they have provided designated areas where any one can smoke freely without affecting any common man.

it is illegal for people to smoke in all public places and they have provided designated areas where any one can smoke freely without affecting any common man. VBwOD
Smoking is injurious to health. Many countries have taken one step forward and it has been made illegal for people to smoke in all public places and they have provided designated areas where any one can smoke freely without affecting any common man. I strongly agree with the statement that smoking kills and countries should make some rules and regulations for it. I further endorse it with the view that, it has a consensus that smoking affects the health and also it is a root cause of many major diseases. It not only stresses the lungs but also causes cancer. Moreover, smoking in public area can also indulge others around in passive smoking. e. g. a few individuals are allergic to smoke, when they are beside a smoker their allergy can trigger headache and cause other health issues. I would like to supplement my view point with the help of an example that numerous countries have controlled smoking by restricting it to a specific area. e. g in planes, public are not allowed to do smoking. They have installed smoking detectors. Furthermore, in many corporate sectors people are not allowed to do smoking in office environment and not even on their desk. they have to go to parking area or to the designated place to do smoking. In addition to it, government has erected signboards on different places to display non-smoking area. Additionally, government strictly instructed smoking companies to add a caption of “injurious to health” on pack of cigarettes. Which can indicate and provide awareness of health issues to public. There are more than 7 billion people on the face of earth planet. Everybody thinks differently. One man’s wine may be another’s poison. Similarly, a few people think that ban on smoking will decline the business of cigarette which ultimately makes many people go unemployed. Also it will lessen the major income of government which they get in form of taxes from these items. To cap up the topic, it could be justified that lawmakers cannot ban the smoking completely, nevertheless they can reduce it by defining a specific smoking area. However, they can make public aware of health concerns by taking these measures.
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countries have taken one step forward and it has
been made
illegal for
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people
to smoke in all
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public
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places and
they have provided designated
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areas
where
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any one
can smoke
freely
without affecting any common
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man
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strongly
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with the statement that
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smoking
kills and countries should
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make
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some
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rules
and regulations for it. I
further
endorse it with the view that, it has a consensus that
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smoking
affects the
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health
and
also
it is a root cause of
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many
major diseases. It not
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only
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stresses
the lungs
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also
causes cancer.
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,
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smoking
in
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public
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can
also
indulge others around in passive
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smoking
.
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a few individuals are allergic to smoke, when they are beside a smoker their allergy can trigger headache and cause other
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health
issues.

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help
of an example that numerous countries have controlled
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smoking
by restricting it to a specific
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area
. e. g in
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planes
,
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public
are not
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allowed
to do
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smoking
. They have installed
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detectors.
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, in
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many
corporate sectors
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people
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to do
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smoking
in office environment and not even on their desk.
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they
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go to parking
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area
or to the designated place to do
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.
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to it,
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government
has erected signboards on
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different
places to display non-smoking
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area
.
Additionally
,
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government
strictly
instructed
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smoking
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companies
to
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add
a caption of “injurious to
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health”
on pack of cigarettes. Which can indicate and provide awareness of
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health
issues to public.

There are more than 7 billion
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people
on the face of earth planet. Everybody
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thinks
differently
. One
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man
’s wine may be another’s poison.
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, a few
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people
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think
that ban on
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smoking
will decline the business of cigarette which
ultimately
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makes
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many
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people
go unemployed.
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Also
it will lessen the major income of
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government
which they
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get
in form of taxes from these items.

To cap up the topic, it could
be justified
that lawmakers cannot ban the
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smoking
completely,
nevertheless
they can
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reduce
it by defining a specific
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smoking
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area
.
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, they can
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make
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public
aware of
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health
concerns by taking these measures.
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IELTS essay it is illegal for people to smoke in all public places and they have provided designated areas where any one can smoke freely without affecting any common man.

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
365 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 5.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
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