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it is generally that some people are born with certain talents, for instance for sport, or to be tayught

it is generally that some people are born with certain talents, for instance for sport, or to be tayught 6KVdG
Right from birth, many children show themselves to be gifted to others. Meanwhile, someone needs a whole training process. In this essay, both views will be presented in more detail. Everyone is born with a talent of their own and no one is the same even if they are children or teenagers. This may be due to the synthesis of genes from the parents. According to a scientific study, children whose parents have a high IQ will have a high rate of achieving the same IQ. More specifically, if their parents are successful in music or sports, they will definitely carry that genes. For example, the son of the famous global football player Cristiano Ronaldo has revealed himself to be a good football player from a very young age. He has excellent technique that doesn't require intensive practice. On the other hand, talent must be cultivated over a long period of time. Children who are born without a gift or talent are not immediately revealed, it takes a process from finding love, having the opportunity to interact, cultivating knowledge, and practicing for thousands of hours to realize their own talent. For example, there was a boy born into a normal family in Brazil, he did not inherit any football genes from his parents, only knowing that his father taught him every day. Get acquainted and practice simply with the ball. Gradually it became the boy's passion and intense love. And that boy is the legendary football player, Pele. In conclusion, talent can be developed in any way, as long as children are given opportunities and conditions to develop that talent. Whether talent is inherited from genes or has to go through a long process of training, it is necessary to create conditions for that talent to develop. Otherwise, genes are still only a theory, talent will not be promoted or that child will forever be unable to find their talent.
Right from birth,
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show
themselves to
be gifted
to others. Meanwhile, someone needs a whole training process. In this essay, both views will
be presented
in more detail.

Everyone
is born
with a
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talent
of their
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own
and no one is the same even if they are
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children
or
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teenagers
. This may be due to the synthesis of genes from the
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parents
. According to a scientific study,
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children
whose
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parents
have a high IQ will have a high rate of achieving the same IQ. More
specifically
, if their
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parents
are successful in music or sports, they will definitely carry that genes.
For example
, the son of the
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famous
global
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football
player Cristiano Ronaldo has revealed himself to be a
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good
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football
player from a
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very
young age. He has excellent technique that doesn't require intensive practice.

On the other hand
,
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talent
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must
be cultivated
over a long period of time.
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Children
who
are born
without a gift or
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talent
are not immediately revealed, it takes a process from finding
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love
, having the opportunity to interact, cultivating knowledge, and practicing for thousands of hours to realize their
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own
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talent
.
For example
, there was a boy born into a normal family in Brazil, he did not inherit any
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football
genes from his
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parents
,
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only
knowing that his father taught him every day.
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Get
acquainted and practice
simply
with the ball.
Gradually
it became the boy's passion and intense
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love
. And that boy is the legendary
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football
player, Pele.

In conclusion
,
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talent
can
be developed
in any way, as long as
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children
are
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given
opportunities and conditions to develop that
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talent
. Whether
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talent
is inherited
from genes or
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has to
go through a long process of training, it is necessary to create conditions for that
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talent
to develop.
Otherwise
, genes are
still
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only
a theory,
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talent
will not
be promoted
or that child will forever be unable to find their
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talent
.
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IELTS essay it is generally that some people are born with certain talents, for instance for sport, or to be tayught

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  American English
4 paragraphs
320 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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