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It is generally believed that some people are born with certain talents, for instance for sport or music, and others are not. However, it is sometimes claimed that any child can be taught to become a good sports person or musician. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

People have different views about the talent by born specially for games and singing as opposes to it is a matter of achieving. Obviously, we haveseenthatmany instance, it depends upon heredity. Such as there are a number of well-known singers and sportsman, they showed their greatness in generation by generation. consequently it is seems that it helps them in a number of ways. By the way, they might be get opportunity in their family to be grown up such that field from their early age. Consequently, they could be able to exhibit their potentiality. Because they rise in a special environment which is helpful to flourish themselves. Furthermore, they can obtain all the facilities to be made in those fields. By the way, after a time the supreme stage they get. However, determination, hard-working, perseverance these virtues can make a person successful in every fields even music and sports. In addition, many people have no by born intellectually, on the contrary they made the way with a great concentration and by all the qualities. Nevertheless, a number of personals bears no strong family ties about the music and games, but ultimately they proved themselves. Therefore, in academic or nonacademic, all the places man can be succeeded if they practice with sincerity, responsibility. While a number of people thinking for music and sports needed by born talent, I believe talentness is a relative topic. Though all tasks could be achievable if a man/women try his/her level best with maximum effort, consequently they ought to keep going to try perpetually. a number of scientist throughout the world showed that, they achieved all the contributions not by born, on the contrary got through a vast knowledge which were they achieved. In conclusion, everyone should try to do better not to focussing on their birth. Although there is a common talk goes on in our society that, a doctor's son/ daughter will be a doctor. A professor's son/ daughter will be a professor, that is not true at all.
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be made
in those fields. By the way, after a time the supreme stage they
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of personals bears no strong family ties about the music and games,
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they proved themselves.
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While a
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of
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thinking for music and sports needed by born talent, I believe
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talentness
is a relative topic. Though all tasks could be achievable if a
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/women try his/her level best with maximum effort,
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going to try
perpetually
.
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of scientist throughout the world
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showed
that, they achieved all the contributions not by born,
on the contrary
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got
through a vast knowledge which were they achieved.

In conclusion
, everyone should try to do better not to focussing on their birth. Although there is a common talk goes on in our society that, a doctor's son/ daughter will be a doctor. A professor's son/ daughter will be a professor,
that is
not true at all.
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IELTS essay It is generally believed that some people are born with certain talents, for instance for sport or music, and others are not. However, it is sometimes claimed that any child can be taught to become a good sports person or musician.

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