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It is generally agreed that society benefits from the work of its members. Compare the contributions of artists to society with the contributions of scientists to society. Which type of contribution do you think is valued more by your society? Give specif v.2

It is generally agreed that society benefits from the work of its members. Compare the contributions of artists to society with the contributions of scientists to society. Which type of contribution do you think is valued more by your society? Give specif v. 2
There is a chance that people's health condition in the future will deteriorate. I completely agree with this conjecture because in the future many people will more often face excess weight related health problems, and environmental issues will negatively affect their well-being. The main reason why I believe that the average standard of people's health will worsen is the fact that more and more people today are overweight or obese, and this trend will continue in the future. Since excess weight provokes such conditions like type two diabetes and heart failure, quality of life of the Earth's population will only worsen. For example, according to the studies today average age of people who experience excess weight related cardiovascular diseases decreased, and modern American children are the first generation which will live shorter than their parents due to it. As a result, excess weight and obesity will result in lower health standard in the future. Another argument why I think that next generations will have lower health standard is an increasing scale of environmental impact on their well-being. The global warming will be the main contributor to the deterioration of people's health, since many people cannot adapt to the climate change. For example, the heat waves which swept Europe this summer have aggravated health condition of the people who suffer from high blood pressure. As a consequence, people's health deterioration in the future is inevitable, since the climate change is obvious. In conclusion, I totally agree with the idea that people's health in the future will get worse because of looming obesity epidemic and the global warming. However, this consequence could be alleviated if people will tackle the excess weight problem and the climate change.
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condition in the
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face
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excess
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weight
related
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health
problems, and environmental issues will
negatively
affect their well-being.

The main reason why I believe that the average standard of
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people's
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health
will worsen is the fact that more and more
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people
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today
are overweight or obese, and this trend will continue in the
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future
. Since
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excess
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weight
provokes such conditions like type two diabetes and heart failure, quality of life of the Earth's population will
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only
worsen.
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today
average age of
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people
who experience
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excess
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weight
related cardiovascular diseases decreased, and modern American children are the
first
generation which will
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live
shorter than their parents due to it.
As a result
,
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excess
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weight
and obesity will result in lower
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health
standard in the future.

Another argument why I
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think
that
next
generations will have lower
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health
standard is an increasing scale of environmental impact on their well-being. The global warming will be the main contributor to the deterioration of
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people's
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health
, since
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many
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people
cannot adapt to the climate
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change
.
For example
, the heat waves which swept Europe this summer have aggravated
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health
condition of the
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people
who suffer from high blood pressure. As a consequence,
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people's
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health
deterioration in the
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future
is inevitable, since the climate
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change
is obvious.

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, I
totally
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with the
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idea
that
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in the
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future
will
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worse
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because
of looming obesity epidemic and the global warming.
However
, this consequence could
be alleviated
if
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people
will tackle the
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excess
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weight
problem and the climate
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change
.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay It is generally agreed that society benefits from the work of its members. Compare the contributions of artists to society with the contributions of scientists to society. Which type of contribution do you think is valued more by your society? Give specif v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
284 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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