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It is fact that majority of people who were sent to prison commit further crime after their release. What is causing this? What can be done to change it?

It is fact that majority of people who were sent to prison commit further crime after their release. What is causing this? What can be done to change it? nV797
As everyone knows that today is a competitive era So each and every person are running behind the money for fulfilling their needs and do commitment that's why the most account of offenders work dispatching into the panel Institute but instead of liberation they are again engaged in commitment. there are various causes of this problem along with relation which will be exploited in upcoming paragraphs. To begin with there are numerous causes of commitment. the predominant one is some people are habitual. To explain it when people engage into violence activities it would be very difficult for them to go out from this habit. Going to this they always repeat the same offence due to it becomes their bad habit. Secondly bad company is also the major cause of offence. Because due to modernization youngsters are taking more interest in violence activity e which makes them violators by watching criminal movies on their cell phones. Due to this day try to change themselves according to them. Hans they again offence. On the other hand there are some solution to sort out this problem firstly government should make strict rule and regulation so that offenders avoid from the criminal activities. In other words government should be organised some counselling centres for giving guidance to violators because with the help of this the can be aware about the commitment of violence activities as well as it also creates fear in their mind. Due to this offenders can avoid from offence. To conclude there is no doubt that due to modernization people are taking a more interest in criminal activities in spite of the other activities. Sweat can be done by government with organise a counselling centres for violetas.
As everyone knows that
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today
is a competitive era
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So
each and every person are running behind the money for fulfilling their needs and do
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commitment
that's why the most account of offenders work dispatching into the panel Institute
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but
instead
of liberation they are again engaged in
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commitment
.
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there
are various causes of this problem along with relation which will
be exploited
in upcoming paragraphs. To
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begin
with there are numerous causes of
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commitment
.
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the
predominant one is
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some
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people
are habitual. To
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explain
it when
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people
engage into violence
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activities
it would be
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very
difficult for them to go out from this habit. Going to this they always repeat the same
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offence
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due
to it becomes their
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bad
habit.
Secondly
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bad
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company
is
also
the major cause of
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offence
.
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Because
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due
to modernization youngsters are taking more interest in violence
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activity
e which
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makes
them violators by watching criminal movies on their cell phones.
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Due
to this day try to
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change
themselves according to them. Hans they again
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offence
.
On the other hand
there are
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some
solution to sort out this problem
firstly
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government
should
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make
strict
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rule
and regulation
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so
that offenders avoid from the criminal
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activities
.
In other words
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government
should be
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organised
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some
counselling
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centres
for giving guidance to violators
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because
with the
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help
of this
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can be aware about the
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commitment
of violence
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activities
as well
as it
also
creates fear in their mind.
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Due
to
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this
offenders can avoid from
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offence
.
To conclude
there is no doubt that
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due
to modernization
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people
are taking a more interest in criminal
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activities
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in spite of
the other
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activities
. Sweat can
be done
by
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government
with
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organise
a counselling
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centres
for
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violetas
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IELTS essay It is fact that majority of people who were sent to prison commit further crime after their release. What is causing this? What can be done to change it?

Essay
  American English
1 paragraphs
287 words
5.5
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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