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It is contended that, if enormous firms and corporations are moving towards the countryside is beneficial to towns because that method helps to resolve the traffic and housing barriers in metropolis cities. While I agree with this situation, I also believe that other methods are to cure the problem. On the one hand, if companies are settling in outside of the cities is valuable for the towns because it maintains the traffic congestion and housing effects. To explain, nowadays people are migrating to city’s for a better life and also for work due to this, the rush in towns is huge it gives detrimental impacts on traffic congestion and housing problem. If corporations are shifting to the countryside it gives relax two cities which are suffering from Jam. Moreover, housing for people is also shortage due to the heavy population in towns most of the people have shared their rooms with many people which affect on the living standard of the cities if working place are moving to cities it s

It is contended that, if enormous firms and corporations are moving towards the countryside is beneficial to towns because that method helps to resolve the traffic and housing barriers in metropolis cities. While I agree with this situation, I also believe that other methods are to cure the problem. On the one hand, if companies are settling in outside of the cities is valuable for the towns because it maintains the traffic congestion and housing effects. To explain, nowadays people are migrating to city’s for a better life and also for work due to this, the rush in towns is huge it gives detrimental impacts on traffic congestion and housing problem. If corporations are shifting to the countryside it gives relax two cities which are suffering from Jam. Moreover, housing for people is also shortage due to the heavy population in towns most of the people have shared their rooms with many people which affect on the living standard of the cities if working place are moving to cities it s AK2M
It is contended that, if enormous firms and corporations are moving towards the countryside is beneficial to towns because that method helps to resolve the traffic and housing barriers in metropolis cities. While I agree with this situation, I also believe that other methods are to cure the problem. On the one hand, if companies are settling in outside of the cities is valuable for the towns because it maintains the traffic congestion and housing effects. To explain, nowadays people are migrating to city’s for a better life and also for work due to this, the rush in towns is huge it gives detrimental impacts on traffic congestion and housing problem. If corporations are shifting to the countryside it gives relax two cities which are suffering from Jam. Moreover, housing for people is also shortage due to the heavy population in towns most of the people have shared their rooms with many people which affect on the living standard of the cities if working place are moving to cities it solves the rush problems. On the other hand, there are other methods which also help the cities are free from the crowd such as government develop all areas by this village people not move into cities, for example, the recent research has been concluded that Japan government progress all the villages with all facilities as a result people not moved into towns by this cities are protected from rush. Another method, higher authorities or private enterprise setup the firms in every area it helps to people for employment as well as for cities are also rush free and people are not go through with the traffic congestion and housing impact those are living in big towns. In conclusion, I would like to reiterate that if big firms are moving to countryside and government maintain rules for towns and also develop the village areas it assist to the cities from crowd obstacles.
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is contended
that, if enormous firms and corporations are moving towards the countryside is beneficial to
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that
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method
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helps
to resolve the
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traffic
and housing barriers in metropolis
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cities
. While I
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agree
with this situation, I
also
believe that other
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methods
are to cure the problem.

On the one hand, if
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companies
are settling in
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outside of
the
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cities
is valuable for the
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towns
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because
it maintains the
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traffic
congestion and housing effects. To
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explain
, nowadays
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people
are migrating to city’s for a better life and
also
for work due to this, the
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rush
in
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towns
is huge it gives detrimental impacts on
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traffic
congestion and housing problem.
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If
corporations are shifting to the countryside it gives relax two
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cities
which are suffering from Jam.
Moreover
, housing for
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people
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is
also
shortage due to the heavy population in
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towns
most of the
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people
have shared their rooms with
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many
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people
which
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affect
on the living standard of the
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cities
if working place are moving to
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cities
it solves the
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rush
problems.
On the other hand
, there are other
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methods
which
also
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help
the
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cities
are free from the crowd such as
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government
develop all areas by this village
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people
not
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move
into
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cities
,
for example
, the recent research has
been concluded
that Japan
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government
progress all the villages with all facilities
as a result
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people
not
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moved
into
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towns
by
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this
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cities
are protected
from
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rush
. Another
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method
, higher authorities or private enterprise
The verb 'set up' is spelled as two words. The noun 'setup' is spelled as one.
setup
the firms in every area it
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helps
to
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people
for employment
as well
as for
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cities
are
also
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rush
free and
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people
are not go through with the
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traffic
congestion and housing impact those are living in
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big
towns.

In conclusion
, I would like to reiterate that if
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big
firms are moving to countryside and
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government
maintain
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rules
for
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towns
and
also
develop the village areas it
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assist
to the
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cities
from crowd obstacles.
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IELTS essay It is contended that, if enormous firms and corporations are moving towards the countryside is beneficial to towns because that method helps to resolve the traffic and housing barriers in metropolis cities. While I agree with this situation, I also believe that other methods are to cure the problem. On the one hand, if companies are settling in outside of the cities is valuable for the towns because it maintains the traffic congestion and housing effects. To explain, nowadays people are migrating to city’s for a better life and also for work due to this, the rush in towns is huge it gives detrimental impacts on traffic congestion and housing problem. If corporations are shifting to the countryside it gives relax two cities which are suffering from Jam. Moreover, housing for people is also shortage due to the heavy population in towns most of the people have shared their rooms with many people which affect on the living standard of the cities if working place are moving to cities it s

Essay
  American English
3 paragraphs
320 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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