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It is claimed that the extinction can't not be eliminated as it is a part of natural process thus human shouldn't interrupt the play.

It is claimed that the extinction can't not be eliminated as it is a part of natural process thus human shouldn't interrupt the play. j8yja
It is claimed that the extinction can't not be eliminated as it is a part of natural process thus human shouldn't interrupt the play. However, I believe that not all the disappearing of any kind is beneficial for environment and human kind. Then the reasons why we support an extinction should be considered carefully. First of all, the Earth has suffering through billions of years and at the very first day of life, living creatures was created and underwent natural collection where many of them was eliminated and only the most suitable survived. This process is unstoppable and continues until our era so it's completely common when a live comes to its end and even in terms of species as that what the mother of nature wants. Dinosaur is a perfect example for this case because those enormous reptiles's extinction culprits was an asteroid impacted into the Earth surface following with years of volcano eruptions waves, totally a natural disaster. Furthermore, their death then became the base for next life generation. In the other hands, an end of a creature nowadays is caused by many reasons and mainly of them is because of human activities that affect badly to the environment. Some of the action such as factories running, manufacturing, building, firing the forest, . . . contribute into climate change, threaten inhabitants nearby. The lost of living land and changes in temperature make many of species going to the edge of extinct an imbalance the natural. In this term, it's clearly not the Earth that ends these animals lives but human. Moreover, this phenomenon is extremely dangerous, animals can lose their lives and so we can too. There is also a theory that human will pay for their unprincipled actions by the rage of mother nature. Fortunately, it's never too late to save the world by changing people's attitudes toward saving animals. Overall, I partly agree that human shouldn't prevent natural extinction to happen but man made threaten should be stopped in other to ensure the long live of human kind and protect the natural balance. 1 1
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is claimed
that the
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extinction
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can't not
be eliminated
as it is a part of
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natural
process
thus
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human
shouldn't interrupt the play.
However
, I believe that not all the disappearing of any kind is beneficial for environment and
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human
kind. Then the reasons why we support an
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extinction
should
be considered
carefully
.

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First of all
, the Earth has suffering through billions of years and at the
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very
first
day of life, living creatures
was created
and underwent
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natural
collection where
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many
of them
was eliminated
and
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only
the most suitable survived. This process is unstoppable and continues until our era
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so
it's completely common when a
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live
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comes
to its
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end
and even in terms of species as that what the mother of nature wants. Dinosaur is a perfect example for this case
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because
those enormous
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reptiles's
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extinction
culprits was an asteroid impacted into the Earth surface following with years of volcano eruptions waves,
totally
a
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natural
disaster.
Furthermore
, their death then became the base for
next
life generation.

In the other hands, an
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end
of a creature nowadays
is caused
by
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many
reasons and
mainly
of them is
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because
of
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human
activities that affect
badly
to the environment.
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Some of the
action such as factories running, manufacturing, building, firing the forest
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, .
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.
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.
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contribute
into climate
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change
, threaten inhabitants nearby. The lost of living land and
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changes
in temperature
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make
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many
of species going to the edge of extinct an imbalance the
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natural
. In this term, it's
clearly
not the Earth that ends these animals
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lives
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but
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human
.
Moreover
, this phenomenon is
extremely
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dangerous
, animals can lose their
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lives and
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so
we can too. There is
also
a theory that
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human
will pay for their unprincipled actions by the rage of mother nature.
Fortunately
, it's never too late to save the world by changing
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people
's attitudes toward saving animals.

Overall
, I partly
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agree
that
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human
shouldn't
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prevent
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natural
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extinction
to happen
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but
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man
made threaten should be
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stopped
in other to ensure the long
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live
of
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human
kind and protect the
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natural
balance.

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IELTS essay It is claimed that the extinction can't not be eliminated as it is a part of natural process thus human shouldn't interrupt the play.

Essay
  American English
6 paragraphs
348 words
5.5
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