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It is better to use your own knowledge and experience to solve problems than to seek advice from others. v.1

It is better to use your own knowledge and experience to solve problems than to seek advice from others. v. 1
In school and university, different course is being studied. In context to the thesis, the female chooses art class while male usually opt to attend a science. This essay will explain the reasons behind tending different theme by male and female as well as providing evidence not to alter this trend. There are numerous reasons that support choices of scholar in attending varied classes. There are numerous reasons two choices of graduate scholar in attending varied class. To begin with, females are more interested toward a subject that follows the history, patience and discipline. As a result of that, they are influenced to choose arts, literature and history. Meanwhile, males are more keen to learning new technical and analytical thing, so that a matter like science, physic chooses by male. For instance, in my owned class, girls choose art, whereas science by boys. In my opinion, it is not essential to make any changes in this trend. It's because pupil themselves attend their own content, according to their personal interest, study and passion. Therefore, if they were forced to choose specific course, it would surely bring negative impact and attitudes in both study and student's mind. Furthermore, without depending upon gender, one's must have right to select their favourite course so that they would fell more comfortable. In conclusion, distinct characteristics of two different sexes: male and female leads to choose topic preference. It provides evidence that the student should give full right to select their classes without being forced.
In school and university,
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course is
being studied
. In context to the thesis, the
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female
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chooses
art
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class
while male
usually
opt to attend a science. This essay will
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explain
the reasons behind tending
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different
theme by male and
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female
as well
as providing evidence not to alter this trend. There are numerous reasons that support choices of scholar in attending varied classes.

There are numerous reasons two choices of graduate scholar in attending varied
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class
. To
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begin
with,
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females
are more interested toward a subject that follows the history, patience and discipline.
As a result
of that, they
are influenced
to
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choose
arts, literature and history. Meanwhile,
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males
are more keen to learning new technical and analytical thing,
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so
that a matter like science, physic
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chooses
by male.
For instance
, in my
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owned
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class
, girls
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choose
art, whereas science by boys.

In my opinion, it is not essential to
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make
any
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changes
in this trend. It's
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because
pupil themselves attend their
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own
content, according to their personal interest, study and passion.
Therefore
, if they
were forced
to
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choose
specific course, it would
surely
bring
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negative
impact and attitudes in both study and student's mind.
Furthermore
, without depending upon gender, one's
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must
have right to select their
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favourite
course
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so
that they would
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fell
more comfortable.

In conclusion
, distinct characteristics of two
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different
sexes: male and
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female
leads to
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choose
topic preference. It provides evidence that the student should give full right to select their
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classes
without
being forced
.
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7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS essay It is better to use your own knowledge and experience to solve problems than to seek advice from others. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
250 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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