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Some People Believe That In The Near Future, There Will Be No Borders Between Countries | Band 9 IELTS Essay Sample v.1

Some People Believe That In The Near Future, There Will Be No Borders Between Countries | Band 9 IELTS Essay Sample v. 1
According to some people national boundaries will disappear in the not-so-distant future. Others, however, contest this view. In my opinion, geographical boundaries will always exist and they are required also. On the one hand, if countries do not have any borders separating them, people can travel freely and explore the world as much as they can. The lack of boundaries may boost trade and thus benefit the economy. For instance, countries like Singapore and Malaysia have no borders between them and so people can travel freely. They do not need a visa or have to go through security checkups before they can enter the other territory. Of course, these two countries enjoy good relationships and as such the lack of border between them is only beneficial for them. On the flip side, not every nation enjoys a good relationship with their neighbours. For example, a border is a must between India and Pakistan. This is essential to stop infiltrators from entering the country. Likewise, there is a strong border between the United States and Mexico and still controlling the flow of drugs from Mexico to the US is quite hard. We can imagine what would happen if there were no borders between these countries. Obviously, borders are crucial for maintaining law and order. They prevent anti-social elements from entering the country. In conclusion, while it is true that there is no place for borders in a perfect world, ours is far from perfect and hence national boundaries are required to check criminal activities and maintain law and order. Therefore, in my opinion, they are here to stay.
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some
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people
national
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boundaries
will disappear in the not-
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so
-distant future. Others,
however
, contest this view. In my opinion, geographical
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boundaries
will always
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exist and
they
are required
also
.

On the one hand, if
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countries
do not have any
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borders
separating them,
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people
can travel
freely
and explore the world as much as they can. The lack of
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boundaries
may boost trade and
thus
benefit the economy.
For instance
,
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countries
like Singapore and Malaysia have no
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borders
between them and
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so
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people
can travel
freely
. They do not need a visa or
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have to
go through security checkups
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before
they can enter the other territory.
Of course
, these two
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countries
enjoy
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good
relationships and as such the lack of
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border
between them is
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only
beneficial for them.

On the flip side, not every nation enjoys a
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good
relationship with their
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neighbours
.
For example
, a
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border
is a
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
must
between India and Pakistan. This is essential to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
stop
infiltrators from entering the
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country
.
Likewise
, there is a strong
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
border
between the United States and Mexico and
still
controlling the flow of drugs from Mexico to the US is quite
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
hard
. We can imagine what would happen if there were no
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
borders
between these
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countries
.
Obviously
,
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borders
are crucial for maintaining law and order. They
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
prevent
anti-social elements from entering the country.

In conclusion
, while it is true that there is no place for
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borders
in a perfect world, ours is far from perfect and
hence
national
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
boundaries
are required
to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
check
criminal activities and maintain law and order.
Therefore
, in my opinion, they are here to stay.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8Mistakes

IELTS essay Some People Believe That In The Near Future, There Will Be No Borders Between Countries | Band 9 IELTS Essay Sample v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
267 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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