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It is believed that new ores should be found to get more crude oil since fuel consumption has increased in the world. This essay disagree with given statement at great extent because digging of earth crust not only harms environment but also destroy habitant of creatours, however it decreases the prices of fuels.

It is believed that new ores should be found to get more crude oil since fuel consumption has increased in the world. This essay disagree with given statement at great extent because digging of earth crust not only harms environment but also destroy habitant of creatours, however it decreases the prices of fuels. KG5oR
On the one hand, finding new areas for takeing out crude oil is hazardous for environment. To elaborate it, when ores is digged with heavy machines then soil particles mix in the air at a huge amount, which is harmful for the health, pollute the environment. As a result, this proccess is not beneficial for health of human, animal and environment. For example, indian state M. P is known for its polluted environment as a number of source of fuel is avalible there. Furtheremore, aquireing more land can damage home of wild animal as well as aquatic life. To expain it, there is only two place to find out new resources, either land or ocean. If it is find at crust, then forest will have to cut down or find in sea, water has to explore. So both method will directly affect nesting of animals. Therefore, it is consider as a danger for these creataor. For instance, UN report shows during the ten years, million hectare jungles has been chopped down only to get land for non renewable energy sources. On the other hand, Extracted crude oil brings down fuel prices. To describe it, it is a commercial fact that extra supply of any good decreases its price. So, when more oil will be found, which will be more than demand, it will decline its current value. Hence, it is beneficial in ecnomical aspect. As a example, the prices of all kind of fuel in arabian countries is less than whole world due to availibility of well of crude oil. To conclude, in my opinion, exploring of unseen places for fossil fuel can bring economical benefits, while it is dangerous for wild life, marine life and atmosphere
On the one hand, finding new areas for
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takeing
out crude oil is hazardous for
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environment
. To elaborate it, when ores
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is
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digged
with heavy machines then soil particles mix in the air at a huge amount, which is harmful for the health, pollute the
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environment
.
As a result
, this
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proccess
is not beneficial for health of human, animal and
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environment
.
For example
,
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indian
state M. P
is known
for its polluted
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environment
as a number of source of
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fuel
is
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avalible
there.
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Furtheremore
,
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aquireing
more land can damage home of wild animal
as well
as aquatic life. To
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expain
it, there is
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only
two place to find out new resources, either land or ocean. If it is
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find
at crust, then forest will
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have to
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cut
down or find in sea, water
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has to
explore.
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So
both method will
directly
affect nesting of animals.
Therefore
, it is
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consider
as a
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danger
for these
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creataor
.
For instance
, UN report
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shows
during the ten years,
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million
hectare jungles has
been chopped
down
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only
to
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get
land for
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non renewable
energy sources.

On the other hand
, Extracted crude oil brings down
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fuel
prices. To
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describe
it, it is a commercial fact that extra supply of any
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good
decreases its price.
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So
, when more oil will
be found
, which will be more than demand, it will decline its
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current
value.
Hence
, it is beneficial in
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ecnomical
aspect. As
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a
example, the prices of all kind of
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fuel
in
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arabian
countries is less than whole world due to
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availibility
of well of crude oil.

To conclude
, in my opinion, exploring of unseen places for fossil
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fuel
can bring
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economical
benefits, while it is
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dangerous
for wild life, marine life and atmosphere
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IELTS essay It is believed that new ores should be found to get more crude oil since fuel consumption has increased in the world. This essay disagree with given statement at great extent because digging of earth crust not only harms environment but also destroy habitant of creatours, however it decreases the prices of fuels.

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